It might be true that world today has become more complex then it had been in past, but claiming that knowledge about the past wont be of any help in important decisins of today is not neccessarly true. Firstly how back in time is past ? It may be something learnt from a friend few days back or story of some incident happened hunders of years back. In both casses having knowledge about past experiences, even if other people's experience would not do any bad but only help.
It's well know that experience is the best teacer, experience when put in other words is knowledge gained by past incide...
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hey..... first nd foremost i
hey.....
first nd foremost i noticed many spelling errors like form insteard of from and bakcup. the spelling mistakes though inevitable ,should not be many .U sud work on that.
Secondly ur examples were perfect, but i think that u could have first explained the general idea more explicitly.Also both ur 1st and 2nd arguments were kinda related. It would have been better if u could have presented a completely different argument . The way u elaborate ur examples is good.
ur 3rd para started off with the example. Though the example was correct , if would have been better if u first explained ur point and then gave d example
.overall the essay was good......a 4 according to me ( mayb m too strict, so dnt take it to ur heart)
Ya you are write about
Ya you are write about spellings, the problem is i hardly get 2 minutes to proof read, and other suggestions are true I will look into them
Thanks for reviewing
has become more complex then it had been
has become more complex than it had been
how knowledge form past can help
how knowledge from past can help
Sentence: It might be true that world today has become more complex then it had been in past, but claiming that knowledge about the past wont be of any help in important decisins of today is not neccessarly true.
Error: decisins Suggestion: decisions
Error: neccessarly Suggestion: necessary
Sentence: It may be something learnt from a friend few days back or story of some incident happened hunders of years back.
Error: hunders Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In both casses having knowledge about past experiences, even if other people's experience would not do any bad but only help.
Error: casses Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: It's well know that experience is the best teacer, experience when put in other words is knowledge gained by past incidents.
Error: teacer Suggestion: teacher
Sentence: This infamous mistake was US military's Black Hawk Helicopter failure in a mission in Somalia which happened a decade ago, keeping this in mind specially desined Black Hawk helicopters along with bakcup helicopters were sent on Bin Laden apprension mission.
Error: desined Suggestion: designed
Error: apprension Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: bakcup Suggestion: backup
Sentence: Such knowledge might not look useful at first glance but is very crucial in defining a person's values and thought process, which indirectly influece a person's decissions.
Error: influece Suggestion: influence
Error: decissions Suggestion: decisions
Sentence: Although world changes contnously into more and more complex form, knowldege about past forms the basis for ones thought process and later people add their own experiences to improve their decission making capabilties.
Error: capabilties Suggestion: capabilities
Error: knowldege Suggestion: knowledge
Error: contnously Suggestion: continuously
Error: decission Suggestion: decision
Sentence: In fact contnously expanding knowlege of past is the reason behind more and more complex world.
Error: contnously Suggestion: continuously
Error: knowlege Suggestion: knowledge
flaws:
No. of Spelling Errors: 16 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 16 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 434 350
No. of Characters: 2144 1500
No. of Different Words: 236 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.564 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.94 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.459 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.7 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.424 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.538 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5