Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
educational institutes should not have a stake in commenting on the field of study for a student. The issue states that educational institutes must have an opinion on the decision of chosing the field of study, by analysing a student's chances of success in any given field. Though it may sound apt in the world where there are infinite permutations of subjects that can shape a student's career, and choosing from those can be optimized by educational institutes by looking at the academic history of a student, but it has its down side.
The only paramenter of judgement for an institute to recommend a field of study is past academic history of an individual. this is a skewed approach. Not all the times a student might give best in an exam, and thus the true talent can never be accessed by means of a few exams. The student might not have prepared oriented to the test patterns. many a times, student might have studied for ther love of the subject and scored low, yet having a deeper understanding of the subject. there are various examples that back the claim. einstein was not good a mathematics as a kid, but he grew up to be one of the smartest brains in physics, which would could not have been foreseen, and schools of the time wqould no9t have agreed to einstein to dwelve into physics and mathematics.
many a times, a student might choose a field of study as he/she truly enjoys the field of study. In such a scenario, a decision by the institute may discourage a student. A wrong field of study will in turn jeopardise the chances of success. Society today encourages the youth to follow the dreams and do what they love to, and this stands against the popular belief. when a student decides to chose a field of study, by his own will, it is a signal that he/she accepts the risk associated with it, and thus would work even hard to achieve success. many of the successful entrepreneurs today have been dropouts, this does not mean they gave up studying. they gave up degrees, and instead studied what they wanted to and would require to succeed in their chosen field. Steve Jobs is an epitome of success who chose to give up a college degree, yet studies all that he was passionate about.
Clearly, a student selecting a field of study at his/her own will, will catapult the chances of success. it can never be an absolute probability of success in either of the scenarios mentioned in the issue. With a lot of student data, it might be, in today's world, possible to predict a student's success in a given field, thanks to the development in analytics. A student's history, coupled with the experience developed by the educational institutes, can predict success fairly accurately, yet, a satisfactory education for a student will be when the the desision is humbly assisted by the educational institutes, and the final call still rests with the student.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, look, may, so, still, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2368.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 507.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67061143984 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64944017497 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479289940828 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 745.2 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.77640449438 619% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.981124762 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.636363636 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0454545455 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.40909090909 5.21951772744 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 7.80617977528 256% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336529841921 0.243740707755 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104734721525 0.0831039109588 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0789956249579 0.0758088955206 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220280592531 0.150359130593 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0634891665586 0.0667264976115 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.