In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for this plant. The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. I am asking the City Council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing
The author of the passage recommends city council to authorize a large campaign to attract autotech company to build its automobile manufacturing plant in hillview. In the process, he quotes benefits of building plant to bolster his arguments. however, for the recommendation to result as predicted, more questions need to be answered as discussed in the following passages.
First and foremost, author states that hillview landfill is a perfect site for construction of the plant. however, he doesn't provide any explanation for that statement. why hillview landfill is perfect site for the construction of the plant? For instance, if there is no electricity supply to hillview landfill area and suppose manufacturing plant requires needs 24/7 electricity, then it is not a wise decision to have plant constructed in hillview landfill. so, author needs to provide more information on why he thinks hillview landfill area is perfect site for constructing the plant.
Second, author states that building and staffing of this plant will be fulfilled by hillview people, who are left unemployed after a computer software company abandoned its national facility. however, the skillset of people working in a software company is completely different from people working to build the plant. therefore, author needs to provide more information about the skillset of the unemployed people and show concrete evidence to support his argument.
In addition, author quotes that he autotech manufacturing plant will alleviate the serious unemployment problem in hillview town. however, he doesn't provide evidence to show that the hillview people are skilled enough to work for the manufacturing plant. so, author needs to answer whether hillview residents have skillset to work for the manufacturing plant or not?
therefore, even though it feels like author had the best interests regarding the hillview residents while writing the letter, his claims are overly exaggerated to the point, they feel dubious. Unless and until author provides concrete answers to the above questions, his recommendation cannot be taken seriously.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
|---|---|---|---|
| 2023-07-12 | Technoblade | 73 | view |
| 2023-05-02 | Payal_2610 | 78 | view |
| 2023-04-22 | keisham | 66 | view |
| 2023-03-29 | aiswaryae | 55 | view |
| 2022-11-22 | Rasika0511 | 57 | view |
- Although it s a new technology solar energy provides benefits to the entire world First solar energy eliminates our reliance on non renewable fossil fuels Additionally solar energy is non pollutant which makes it better for everyone Finally there is almos 63
- In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for this plant. The 61
- Sea otters are a small mammal that lives in the waters along North America s west coast from California to Alaska A few years ago some of the sea otter populations off of the Alaskan coast started to decline rapidly and raised several concerns because o 73
- In a vote that took place at the International Astronomical Union Conference on August 24th 2006 Pluto lost its status as a planet in our solar system Pluto was originally discovered in 1930 when scientists were searching for something that was interfe 90
- Eco certification and American wood companies Integrated Reading Section In an effort to encourage ecologically sustainable forestry practices an international organization started issuing certifications to wood companies that meet high ecological standar 73
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 328 350
No. of Characters: 1749 1500
No. of Different Words: 156 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.256 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.332 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.899 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 146 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 41 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.328 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.477 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.82 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.281 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 246, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...uilding plant to bolster his arguments. however, for the recommendation to result as pr...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 107, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...ect site for construction of the plant. however, he doesnt provide any explanation for ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 119, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... construction of the plant. however, he doesnt provide any explanation for that statem...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 170, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Why
...ide any explanation for that statement. why hillview landfill is perfect site for t...
^^^
Line 7, column 461, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...plant constructed in hillview landfill. so, author needs to provide more informati...
^^
Line 13, column 193, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...ompany abandoned its national facility. however, the skillset of people working in a so...
^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 319, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...from people working to build the plant. therefore, author needs to provide more informati...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 19, column 131, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
... unemployment problem in hillview town. however, he doesnt provide evidence to show tha...
^^^^^^^
Line 19, column 143, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...t problem in hillview town. however, he doesnt provide evidence to show that the hillv...
^^^^^^
Line 19, column 257, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...h to work for the manufacturing plant. so, author needs to answer whether hillvie...
^^
Line 25, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...he manufacturing plant or not? therefore, even though it feels like author had t...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 325.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.64 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94734862297 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489230769231 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1542924861 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.5625 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3125 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.70786347227 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325715801278 0.218282227539 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135299636518 0.0743258471296 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0908343454262 0.0701772020484 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184150111738 0.128457276422 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108332220137 0.0628817314937 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.43 12.5979740519 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.