It is said that the amount of violence on the TV programs has negative effect on our social development and therefore should be reduced.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
there has been many statements against the violence elements on tv shows in recent years. It is believed to have brought tremendous impacts to the society as a whole, and the majority stated that this should be alleviated. I totally agree with the idea.
To begin with, youngsters especially teenagers are easily effected by the things broadcasted by the media. young children enjoy imitating the images on tv because in their reflections, such images look awesome. For example, if teenagers try to smoke or drink after seeing actors or actress on the screen doing so, this will turn into a habit. this habit, however, will eventually be nurtured day by day. Although smoke and drink seem to be harmless to the society, the insidious effects of such is considerable. drunk people can hardly control the behaviors, therefore, they may injure others unconscious, like in Vietnam, many domestic abuse cases are the result of a drunk husband.
Furthermore, nowadays, most of the tv programs are criminal shows. Several famous series of films show on tv during prime time like “murder in the first” or “how to get away with murder”. Despite of attractive plot, such films contain many criminal elements which is unsuitable for the young, and they are still able to watch those. By virtue of that, there has been an incline in the number of illegal action on the worldwide scale.
Summing up, for all the reasons mentioned above, I deem that shows, programs or films which include criminal or violence scenes should be mitigated on the screen. Instead, more educational program shall be shown on tv.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, still, therefore, for example, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1361.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07835820896 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66609895708 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64552238806 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.7388139397 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7333333333 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8666666667 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13333333333 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184453425772 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0612575013386 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403224816339 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11499140204 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435752125254 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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