TOEFL ESSAY: Many people believe it is very important to make large amounts of money, while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living. Analyze each viewpoint and take a stand. Give specific reasons for your position.

We make a career choice by considering the amount of money that we can expect to earn. It is up to us to decide whether it is important to make massive amounts of money or whether we are satisfied to earn a comfortable living. Certainly, there are good reasons for both decisions.

The people who made ridiculous amounts of money, they gained respect and earned the power. These are the people who are changing the world. Look at the Steve Jobs’, the Bill Gates’, and Oprah in the world. They put in the time and effort to reverse the money, power, respect guideline, and it not only paid off f...

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