Claim: While boredom is often expressed with a sense of self-satisfaction, it should really be a source of embarrassment.
Reason: Boredom arises from a lack of imagination and self-motivation.
Boredom arises when we are trapped something that we find meaningless, when we get less interested in a matter that we originally are passionate about, or when we stop moving forward in a situation. The claim concluding boredom as a source of embarrassment due to its linkage with lack of imagination and self-motivation goes way too far in generalizing the emotion. While in some cases boredom might be a result of self-satisfaction, there are many other reasons leading to boredom. It would be too extreme to completely blame the person with the emotion, as external factors contribute significantly as well.
To start with, it is undeniably true that boredom may be caused by a lack of self-motivation of an individual. Consider a middle-aged man who is bored about his daily routine of going to work as a white collar every day. He works from 9 to 5, goes home for dinner, watches television, and goes to bed every day. The emotion of boredom arises due to this monotonous living pattern. However, whether or not his life is boring completely depends on his will to modify how he live his life. He can go out with his friends after work, or pick up a hobby during the weekends, or even join voluntary activities to add meaning to his daily routine. The illusion of our lives stop moving forward, in these cases, is completely due to a lack of self-motivation to make things going.
However, not all feelings of boredom can be eliminated by looking inwards; sometimes external factors make us feel bored. It must be acknowledge that we as humans, cannot control every situation we face in life, and in many times, we can be trapped in unhealthy environments, causing boredom. For example, we may feel bored living in a city where the culture is monotonous, and environment not as desirable as we imagined. Take the city of Hong Kong as an example – air pollution is serious, people do not communicate with each other on street except looking into their phones, cars honk everywhere they go – it is hard to not feel bored and tired of our everyday routines when the external environment is unforgiving. Some may say that we can still find interesting things happening in a city no matter what, if a person has the imagination. Yet, it is a lot harder to feel the beat given these circumstances, and we should not blame the individual if he/she feels bored in this case.
Lastly, it is completely normal for boredom to arise as time goes by, in the case when our interest in a matter or an activity slowly deteriorates with time. There is always a limitation in the variety that an activity can generate, no matter how creative we are. For instance, in ballet, no matter how many variations of the same pose that a dancer can create, there are limitations on the music and styles that he/she can recreate. It would not be an embarrassing act for her to switch her focus from ballet to perhaps jazz or hip hop, or even to pick up another hobby for her own interests. Boredom arises when the possibilities are used up, and things start to repeat itself. It is a completely normal phenomenon, and we should not blame ourselves for feeling bored because of that.
In conclusion, there are many reasons leading to the emotion of boredom, and we cannot conclude that it should be a source of embarrassment in general just because of a single reason.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 382, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cases'' or 'case's'?
Suggestion: cases'; case's
...generalizing the emotion. While in some cases boredom might be a result of self-satis...
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Line 5, column 392, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...his monotonous living pattern. However, whether or not his life is boring completely depends o...
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Line 9, column 730, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'saith', 'says'.
Suggestion: saith; says
...al environment is unforgiving. Some may say that we can still find interesting thin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, lastly, look, may, so, still, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in general, in some cases, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 33.0505617978 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2786.0 2235.4752809 125% => OK
No of words: 590.0 442.535393258 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72203389831 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92848004997 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86372722859 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 215.323595506 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481355932203 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 908.1 704.065955056 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.77640449438 619% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3337642366 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.083333333 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5833333333 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95833333333 5.21951772744 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 17.0 5.13820224719 331% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231423162867 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0760909560554 0.0831039109588 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0900192362424 0.0758088955206 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151937141867 0.150359130593 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0813503791696 0.0667264976115 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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