Over the past few years, many residents have sparked off an argument over imprisonment, in which it is believed to be less efficient than education in tackling crimes. While I accept that an improvement in education is advantageous, I opine that a prison sentence also exert positive influences on wrongdoers.
On the one hand, a pedagogical approach plays an important role in eradicating evils because of two major reasons. Firstly, only by education will moral and cultural values be instilled into learners’ mind. Therefore, this is expected to shape their patterns of behavior and create dignified citizens, who can embrace social fabrics, as well as eliminate any manipulation against codes of conduct. Secondly, education, which integrates regulations and legal terms into curricula, also helps social members entirely grasp the importance of obeying the law. Thus, it is safe to say that if people are sufficiently provided with such lessons, they are less likely to turn into crimes.
On the other hand, benefits brought about by imprisonment should not be overlooked. Indeed, serving a prison sentence, offenders will receive a harsh corporal punishment, and this may leave an indelible impression that any crime will be treated by the full weight of the law. As a result, ex-prisoners are believed to see the error of their way, which may not be reaped by other forms of punishing wrongdoers. For example, this can be illustrated by a recent study conducted among juvenile delinquents, in which 80% of total population reported that serving out a custodial sentence necessitates them being law-abiding citizens in order not to suffer consequences because of crimes. In contrast, if imprisonment is abolished, maintaining the policy of zero tolerance will be increasingly challenging and, hence, solutions for crimes may become scarce.
In brief, while not disavowing the significance of education, it seems to me that imprisonment is also essential in assuring social tranquility.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 146, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sential in assuring social tranquility.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, in brief, in contrast, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1695.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41533546326 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10364599807 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626198083067 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8098254997 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.384615385 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0769230769 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.9230769231 7.06120827912 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156282436642 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524180553515 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0379797946381 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0816558343097 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405031572361 0.056905535591 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.97 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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