In many countries imprisonment is the most common solution to crimes. However some people believe that better education will be a more effective solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many residents have sparked off an argument over imprisonment, in which it is believed to be less efficient than education in tackling crimes. While I accept that an improvement in education is advantageous, I opine that a prison sentence exert similar positive influences on preserving social tranquility.

On the one hand, a pedagogical approach plays a pivotal role in eradicating evils because of two major reasons. Firstly, only by education will moral and cultural values be instilled into learners’ mind. Therefore, this is expected to shape their patterns of behavior and create dignified citizens, who can embrace social fabrics, as well as fight against any criminal behavior. Secondly, education, which integrates regulations and legal terms into curricula, is believed to enhance social members’ abilities to act within the law. Indeed, no sooner are people sufficiently provided with such knowledge, which helps them fully aware of illegal manipulations and their consequences, than they become more likely to prevent themselves from turning into crimes.

On the other hand, benefits brought about by imprisonment should not be underestimated. Indeed, serving a prison sentence, offenders will receive a harsh corporal punishment, and this may leave an indelible impression that crimes are treated by the full weight of the law. In fact, a recent study conducted among British juvenile delinquents, 80% of total population reported that a rigorous experience in prison necessitates them being law-abiding citizens. In other words, it was such tough treatments that can make criminals see the error of their way, and deter them from perpetuating evils. By contrast, if a society devoid of imprisonment is established, this may not only result in obstacle to maintaining the policy of zero tolerance, but also cause a lack of significant strategies for punishing wrongdoers.

To sum up, while not disavowing the benefits reaped from education, it seems to me that imprisonment is also essential in solving crime challenges.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, while, in fact, as well as, in other words, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1742.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54777070064 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14130932137 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.665605095541 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1945880285 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.0 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1538461538 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8461538462 7.06120827912 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118870664361 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0396084681551 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.039747457889 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0667784967368 0.151304729494 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314714440524 0.056905535591 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 12.4159519038 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.66 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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