The chart indicates the number of people who have heart attacks every year in the US.Describe the main feature of the chart and make comparison where relevant

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The chart indicates the number of people who have heart attacks every year in the US.
Describe the main feature of the chart and make comparison where relevant

The given bar chart illustrates the annual number of men and women of 3 age groups who suffer from heart attacks in the USA.

Generally, the older people are, the higher risk of heart attacks they have. In addition, in all age group, men are more vulnerable to the disease than women, reflecting in the their higher number of patients in all age group.

Turning to the detail, in the age group of 29 to 44, 123 thousand male patients have heart attack, while the figure for women is only 3 thousand. Regarding to the age group from 45 to 64, there are 424 thousand men who undergo heart attacks, while the similar medical situation was witnessed in a three-time lower frequency in women, with 136 thousand cases.

When people turn to older than 65 years old, the risk of heart attack reaches the highest point. To be more specific, number of cases suffered by both male and female person upsurge, at 440 and 374 thousand, respectively.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, regarding, so, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 780.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 167.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67065868263 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.59483629437 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35792842446 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.604790419162 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 229.5 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3863990037 43.030603864 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.428571429 112.824112599 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8571428571 22.9334400587 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 5.23603664747 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 1.13902439024 615% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175610442607 0.215688989381 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0955739060034 0.103423049105 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654540514735 0.0843802449381 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121316417795 0.15604864568 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477698500421 0.0819641961636 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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