The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Batavia newspaper.
"The department of agriculture in Batavia reports that the number of dairy farms throughout the country is now 25 percent greater than it was 10 years ago. During this same time period, however, the price of milk at the local Excello Food Market has increased from $1.50 to over $3.00 per gallon. To prevent farmers from continuing to receive excessive profits on an apparently increased supply of milk, the Batavia government should begin to regulate retail milk prices. Such regulation is necessary to ensure fair prices for consumers."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the above stated letter to the editor , it is stated that dairy farms in last ten years have been inreased by 25% and the price of milk has also increased in this period finally providing excessive profit to the farmers.Hence inorder to ensure fair price to the consumer the writer claims that it is better to have regulations enacted for the retail milk price by the Batavia government.The writer has come to the conclusions by the data he presents that shows increase in dairy farms and increase in milk price.However, before this recommendations can be properly addressed,three questions must be answered.
Firstly,is the increase in dairy farms means increase in supply of milk? it is possible that due to better scope in dairy many youths might have attracted to this field without any research and they might br producing milk which is superflous than the demand. The writer is talking about the whole country incase of dairy farms increase and he/she is considering local market for the price.For instance, it might be the case in other parts that supply is over than the demand and the price might have decreased in this region.Hence, famers in this region might have been in loss .
Secondly,does that price increase in local excello food market applicable to the whole country?it is possible that the price might have inreased only in this local market because of the limited supply in this area or might be due to the high quality milk produced in this area .The claim of increase in price is only limited to this area and the overall nationwide research must be done before coming to this recommendation.
Thirdly,Does the increase in farms means increase in profit? it is possible that over this ten yesrs period the ration that the farmers feeding to the dairy cows might have increased drastically ,finally increasing the price of the milk and decreasing the net profit.Therefore, otrhers factors affecting the price of milk should be considered .only the increase price cannot determine whether the farmer is having excessive profit or not.
Therefore, argument,as it stands now is considerably flawed due to its lack of research and unwarranted assumptions.If the auther is able to answer these above mantioned questions answers and do extensive overal research then only it will be viable to reach to the recommendation of fixing retail price of milk.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 409 350
No. of Characters: 1940 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.497 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.743 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.444 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 58.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.646 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.532 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.845 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.227 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, for instance, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1984.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 395.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02278481013 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82957318359 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.455696202532 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 19.7664670659 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 49.0 22.8473053892 214% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 173.542817123 57.8364921388 300% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 248.0 119.503703932 208% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 49.375 23.324526521 212% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 16.625 5.70786347227 291% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 5.25449101796 438% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108159707982 0.218282227539 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563240111536 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0342556897057 0.0701772020484 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0653943843309 0.128457276422 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422039703735 0.0628817314937 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.9 14.3799401198 187% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 21.74 48.3550499002 45% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.4 12.197005988 184% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.32208582834 115% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 54.0 12.3882235529 436% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 21.6 11.1389221557 194% => OK
text_standard: 22.0 11.9071856287 185% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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