People often think about creating an ideal society, but most of the times fail in making this happen. What is your opinion about an ideal society? How can we create an ideal society?

Since the beginning of the human race, people have always struggled to create a perfect society, but so far it has not become reality yet. In my opinion, the conflict between different views on an ideal society made it impossible to approach. Yet, there are many ways that we can do to reach the excellence of society.

I am of the opinion that it is apparently impossible to achieve a perfect society. Commonly, this scenario is characterized by the end of discrimination which illustrates the mindset of a small minority of people who believe that some races are superior to others. The debate among them has never been closed. Furthermore, creating an ideal society means that all of the opinions in this world have to be satisfied, which is unachievable. In other words, trying to fulfill an individual’s need could lead to the divergence between people.

Despite the fact that the idea of constructing an ideal society is likely unable to achieve, there are some feasible suggestions which could be implemented to obtain fulfillment among community. Generally, governmental bodies should make joint efforts to increase the equality between individuals of its community. To illustrate, society and its institutions should treat all citizens equally and with dignity that provides them safety without any discrimination concerning. It is also every individual’s responsibility to contribute to the evolvement of the human race. The process of imparting altruism value generation helps us to take one step towards utopian to young , inclusive society free of prejudice. For example, now the most schools teach our children about alternative lifestyles such as the diversity of skin colors or gender.

In conclusion, an ideal society is unattainable but humanity could take actions to eradicate racism and inequality.

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Average: 8.9 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: all the
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Suggestion:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, furthermore, if, so, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1550.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36332179931 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15381353817 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636678200692 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1317015968 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.333333333 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2666666667 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332255211154 0.244688304435 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0934605372295 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0902098837803 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2057881533 0.151304729494 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397596924981 0.056905535591 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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