However, our modern universe provides us a different life which is easier and more convenience there are some drawbacks in comparison with the past. Older people in the contemporary era are not as happy as their parents were because they do not meet the other persons routinely. They also suffer from many diseases which did not exist in previous years and this is because of low level of exercising they have. Some of important reasons for this fact have been explained concisely in the following sentences and in continue some solutions have been offered in order to improve the elders' situation.
First of all, it is confirmed by all people that human being has traded modern lifestyle by getting loneliness. Nowadays, our old parents live in high skyscrapers solely without any interactions with the others even their neighbors. Also, some values in many nations have been degraded by the rise of industrialism and one of them is caring the older father and mothers. For example, in eastern cultures, there was a tradition that children kept their parents in their home for protecting them physically and mentally but this tradition has been vanished in new generations. On the other hand, the advent of technology has brought a comfortable life without so-called problems but this has taught humans to be inactive and lazy. Despite of many progresses in medical sciences we can not neglect a level of activity that anyone particularly an old person should have. For instance, many new inventions such as online buying, social medias have decreased the outgoing hours of retired people and this has resulted in many health challenges for this segment of societies.
Secondly, although there are unfavorable circumstances but also governments and politicians could organize some plans as efficient solutions. Municipalities should construct some places in parks for elders in order to gather them together and make them more socialized with the aim of mitigating loneliness. Also, the organizations which are responsible for promoting sport and exercising in cities should hold some events and competitions for some specific ages to encourage retired people for sport and healthier life.
To summarize, youngsters should watch out carefully their grandparents and also they have to care them emotionally by meeting them constantly and contacting them day by day. And simultaneously rulers should consider long-term programs and enough budgets for old people to improve the quality.
- TPO-45 Integrated Writing Task 80
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- TPO 49- Independent writingDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily. 78
- TPO-11 - Integrated Writing Task A recent study reveals that people especially young people are reading far less literature,novels, plays, and poems,than they used to. This is troubling because the trend has unfortunate effects for the reading public, for 88
- TPO-28 - Integrated Writing Task Robert E. Peary was a well-known adventurer and arctic explorer who in 1909 set out to reach the North Pole. When he returned from the expedition, he claimed to have reached the pole on April 7, 1909. This report made him 88
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 156, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Older) must be used with a third-person verb: 'peoples'.
Suggestion: peoples
...acks in comparison with the past. Older people in the contemporary era are not as happ...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 582, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'elders'' or 'elder's'?
Suggestion: elders'; elder's
...ve been offered in order to improve the elders situation. First of all, it is confi...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2102.0 1615.20841683 130% => OK
No of words: 396.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30808080808 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82915300466 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563131313131 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.4083488105 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.375 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186158175655 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620525555076 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520014585015 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115907348319 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0819686481715 0.056905535591 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 78.4519038076 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.