The author stated that in the city of Winston have two large department stores:Namen and Roscoe.Namen is for people having good and wealthy background, bit costly high end clothes and Roscoe is more for the middle class people, having more of affordable fashion options.The both opponents are considering to open store in the suburb of Salem, where the population has grown over 50% in the last year and the median incomes is $75000.Before these recommendation from both the competitors can be fully evaluated we need to look into few points.
Firstly the author states that the population of the Salem has grown over 50% in the last three years but failed to state that how much was the earlier population.And to open the store in that area, are both Namen and Roscoe are even comparable? Does the circumstances help each of the store to make profits in that particular area?There might be a possibility that the population of that area has a median salary over $100000 and population growing over 50% thus reducing the median of income as well doesn't make a good aspect for Namen to open the store in such area.This kind of situation can be well suited for Roscoe.But what if the after even increasing the population by 50% still the population is less, which doesn't suit any of the departmental stores to open their respective store. Why a large kind of store has not opened earlier, the weather could be just bad there. However, opening a store in such place can also generate employment which could led to the improvement of the economy.
Secondly more of situations lies in the court of Roscoe because things are more affordable and having a median salary of $75000 would help in generating the profits for the company. But there could be a case where most of people the have very less salary's somewhere around 30k but in every society there are outliers which makes huge amount of money, making the median of salary equal to 75k, this could be the false figure for Roscoe.
In conclusion of the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwanted assumptions.If the author is able to provide reasons for the above questions and offer more evidence(perhaps in the form of more systematic research study), then it is possible to fully evaluate the possibility of the proposed recommendation provided by the author.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 416 350
No. of Characters: 1914 1500
No. of Different Words: 204 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.516 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.601 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.51 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 118 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 72 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 41.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 29.238 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.383 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.622 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 97, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Namen
...arge department stores:Namen and Roscoe.Namen is for people having good and wealthy b...
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Line 1, column 271, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...ving more of affordable fashion options.The both opponents are considering to open ...
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Line 1, column 432, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Before
...ast year and the median incomes is 5000.Before these recommendation from both the comp...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 432, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ast year and the median incomes is 5000.Before these recommendation from both the comp...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 439, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this recommendation' or 'these recommendations'?
Suggestion: this recommendation; these recommendations
...r and the median incomes is 5000.Before these recommendation from both the competitors can be fully ...
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Line 3, column 164, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
...hat how much was the earlier population.And to open the store in that area, are bot...
^^^
Line 3, column 333, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: There
...to make profits in that particular area?There might be a possibility that the populat...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 501, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...s reducing the median of income as well doesnt make a good aspect for Namen to open th...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 568, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...or Namen to open the store in such area.This kind of situation can be well suited fo...
^^^^
Line 3, column 621, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...situation can be well suited for Roscoe.But what if the after even increasing the p...
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Line 3, column 717, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...50% still the population is less, which doesnt suit any of the departmental stores to ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 213, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the people') or simply say ''most people''.
Suggestion: most of the people; most people
...ompany. But there could be a case where most of people the have very less salarys somewhere ar...
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Line 7, column 125, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...eliance on several unwanted assumptions.If the author is able to provide reasons f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, well, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1955.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 405.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82716049383 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71229369967 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520987654321 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 19.7664670659 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 50.0 22.8473053892 219% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 166.247556373 57.8364921388 287% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 244.375 119.503703932 204% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 50.625 23.324526521 217% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 14.375 5.70786347227 252% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292007357805 0.218282227539 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119553705923 0.0743258471296 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0988976588485 0.0701772020484 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171689692349 0.128457276422 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116793017626 0.0628817314937 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.6 14.3799401198 185% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.19 48.3550499002 60% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 21.6 12.197005988 177% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.62 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.32208582834 113% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 12.3882235529 242% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 22.0 11.1389221557 198% => OK
text_standard: 22.0 11.9071856287 185% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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