The graph below shows the number of male and female of male and female students studying IT at university from 1985-2015

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The graph below shows the number of male and female of male and female students studying IT at university from 1985-2015

The line graph compires the number of male and female students studying IT at university from 1985-2015.

Overall,it can be seen that there was increase of the amount of boys from 1985 till 2015.Girls risen dramatically from 1990 to 2010,then decrease.

In 1985 woman learners learning very less than men.woman pupils were only around 1000 and male students were more than girls.There were about 5000.After this in 1990 they both equalled.Then female pupils grew,if we compare two genders.in 2006 they were similar about 27000.So in 2010 women increased and were 33000. But men were 34000. In 2015 girls didn't grow.

Generally,the graph shows that the number of two genders attained had a greater impact on people's education to computer programming in the past than more recently.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 664.0 965.302439024 69% => OK
No of words: 126.0 196.424390244 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26984126984 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.35036895883 3.73543355544 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63396425558 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 106.607317073 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.714285714286 0.547539520022 130% => OK
syllable_count: 181.8 283.868780488 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 99.7897790357 43.030603864 232% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 110.666666667 112.824112599 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.83333333333 5.23603664747 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 1.69756097561 707% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325089593576 0.215688989381 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180450376759 0.103423049105 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.250172255587 0.0843802449381 296% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256556928436 0.15604864568 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.27606609576 0.0819641961636 337% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.2329268293 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 11.4140731707 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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