Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Having an opportunity to do a job that you are satisfied or enjoyable is sometimes the hardest thing in the society. when it comes up with the practical problem, all the dream jobs that you wish to have could all gone. For me, a personal opinion, getting a secure job as soon as you have an opportunity is the choice that i would make. To prove my conclusion, I will address more practical examples down below.
first of all that came into my mind was the perfect example of myself, which I am a freshman just get a work for one year. when the economic environment changes so fast that everyone couldn't keep up with, a freshman without any experience can have less opportunity to make herself/himself into a right place that fits his/her talent. thus, when i graduate, I grab every chance that I can have, and choose to be a theater salesman as my first job. Following the low payment and long-time working, I rather consider about the salary but what could I learn from the work. To interact with many kinds of clients, what you learn is patient, concentration and responsibility. In this case, a secure job may seem pretty a hardship job at first, however, for the practical reason, you can get paid stably, make yourself a better living life, and also some benefits you may not aware, such as being alertness in any condition, and being responsible for your job, cause you can not leave the position whenever you want.
Moving on, a satisfying job is determined by time, age, salary or location. considering all these undecidable reasons, it is hard to fully support people to wait for a wonderful job. For example, if you are under 30 years old, you may not have formed a family yet, thus, the financial problem would only disturbed yourself, thus to have a job or not is one's own concern, then you could manage your finance to wait for a job you really desired. however, when you live a life with children, you may not only concern about yourself. Accessing a high salary job would be your first criteria, even the content of the job may not be your first choice.
Therefore, to wait for a job that you never know when to start might not be a clever choice.
Finally, though i mentioned about all the possibility to support the conclusion, there are still many reasons that I would rather wait a job that satisfied me than grab the opportunity of the security. it is not possible that you choose a job and get off it in a week, what it means is that if you choose a job you don't like, you still have responsibility to maintain it, as a matter of fact, you could lose an opportunity to find your dream job. it is a double-sword question, for many reason i mentioned above, it is clear to state my conclusion as getting a secure job first.
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- TPO 52 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 66
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- TPO 31_ Independent--Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 60
- Large numbers of dinosaur fossils have been discovered in deposits on Alaska's North Slope, a region that today experiences an extremely cold, arctic climate. One hundred million years ago, when those dinosaurs were alive, the environment of the North Slo 3
- TPO 52 integrated writing task 16
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
...times the hardest thing in the society. when it comes up with the practical problem,...
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Line 1, column 230, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
... wish to have could all gone. For me, a personal opinion, getting a secure job as soon as you ha...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... have an opportunity is the choice that i would make. To prove my conclusion, I w...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ess more practical examples down below. first of all that came into my mind was ...
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Suggestion: First
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Suggestion: When
... freshman just get a work for one year. when the economic environment changes so fas...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...vironment changes so fast that everyone couldnt keep up with, a freshman without any ex...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
...a right place that fits his/her talent. thus, when i graduate, I grab every chance t...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ce that fits his/her talent. thus, when i graduate, I grab every chance that I ca...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Considering
...mined by time, age, salary or location. considering all these undecidable reasons, it is ha...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...e to wait for a job you really desired. however, when you live a life with children, yo...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...f the job may not be your first choice. Therefore, to wait for a job that you ne...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... a clever choice. Finally, though i mentioned about all the possibility to ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...conclusion, there are still many reasons that I would rather wait a job that sat...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ere are still many reasons that I would rather wait a job that satisfied me tha...
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Suggestion:
...uld rather wait a job that satisfied me than grab the opportunity of the securit...
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Suggestion: It
...n grab the opportunity of the security. it is not possible that you choose a job a...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...t means is that if you choose a job you dont like, you still have responsibility to ...
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Suggestion: It
... an opportunity to find your dream job. it is a double-sword question, for many re...
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Line 15, column 486, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'many reasons'.
Suggestion: many reasons
...job. it is a double-sword question, for many reason i mentioned above, it is clear to state...
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Line 15, column 498, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... double-sword question, for many reason i mentioned above, it is clear to state m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, really, so, still, then, therefore, thus, for example, such as, as a matter of fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2262.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51497005988 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60611387215 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49500998004 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.7546186936 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.052631579 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3684210526 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47368421053 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.5376344086 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407772811529 0.236089414692 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135332909911 0.076458572812 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702358769751 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25730603719 0.150856017488 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04035971746 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.