Write a letter to a company asking for a refund for something you bought from them online. In your letter include:- what you bought- what the problem is- why you want a refund

Hi,

I am writing this letter to acknowledge you about the defective products you sell online. Recently ,I have purchased a diamond ring from amazon online store to surprise my mother on her 60th birthday. I have bought this ring by all my saving this year after my bank corrupt. Firstly, I got the product delivery very late in the evening and I was bit socked to see that there was half diamond attached in the ring rest was empty.Therefore, It was really a heart broken for me and my mother. I got no cash left in my home as i spend all for this product. However, Would you please mind refunding the purchased amount against my name and raise the ticket soon as possible.

Finally, I would advise you to please recheck the product before shipping it to the customer to maintain a good reputation in the market. Customer trust is the key success to achieve a great business.

Many Thanks,
Shahin

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 99, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ctive products you sell online. Recently ,I have purchased a diamond ring from ama...
^^
Line 3, column 347, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'bitten'.
Suggestion: bitten
...very very late in the evening and I was bit socked to see that there was half diamo...
^^^
Line 3, column 429, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Therefore
...ond attached in the ring rest was empty.Therefore, It was really a heart broken for me an...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 524, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...other. I got no cash left in my home as i spend all for this product. However, Wo...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, really, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 746.0 937.175257732 80% => OK
No of words: 163.0 206.0 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57668711656 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57311423478 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51710247813 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 127.690721649 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.650306748466 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 231.3 290.88556701 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4329083357 44.8134815571 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.8888888889 76.5299724578 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1111111111 16.8248392259 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 4.34317383033 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.29896907216 47% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167470760983 0.216113520407 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641086102658 0.0766984524023 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0761464796222 0.0603063233224 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108255626433 0.12726935374 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0553076813342 0.0580467560999 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 70.7449484536 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 8.71597938144 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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