14- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Nowadays, no one can turn a blind eye to the significant effects of traveling on people's lives. In this regard, some are inclined toward the opinion that foreign travel has numerous advantages for people. On the other extreme of the rope, others hold the opposite idea, think that if people travel in their own country, they can gain more benefits than go to other countries. Although both sides take their own positions, personally speaking, I firmly believe that the first group carries more weight. In the following paragraph, I will cogently explain my reasons to justify my viewpoints.
As the first and paramount reason, foreign travel can provide a wide range of opportunities helping people develop their knowledge and expand their horizons about other countries. In other words, by taking a trip to foreign countries, individuals can communicate and interact considerably with several people having different traditions and customs. Various countries all across the world have different languages, histories, religions, and even clothes and foods. Thus, traveling abroad encourages people to read more about local people and learn new lifestyles. Take my own experience as a compelling example. Last year, my family and I traveled to Spain. Not only could we learn a new and interesting language, but we also got acquainted with various people with different clothes, which were very similar to our traditional clothes and customs. Furthermore, we could taste different foods and learned how Spanish people use vegetables in their diet efficiently. Therefore, the more foreign countries people travel, the more cultures and traditions they get familiar with.
The second reason coming to my mind to substantiate my viewpoint is that foreign countries having more advanced technologies and facilities encourage people to go there. To be more specific, these days, many European and Asian countries have been developing various amusement facilities to attract many people, who do not have any chance to enjoy some exciting experiences in their own countries. Actually, since some people cannot access their favorite and interesting facilities and technologies in their countries, they want to spend their vacation time and money in countries having various new and cheap markets and malls. For instance, research conducted by some master sociology experts shows that many Asian people want to take a journey to Thailand to play poker or participate in various sexual carnivals, which are banned in many religious countries such as Iran and Saudi Arabia. In fact, some foreign countries have very cheap markets, modern parks, and a free atmosphere that allows passengers to do what they want without any strict laws. Hence, traveling to some foreign countries can help people save their money effectively and enjoy using those countries' technology and amusement hubbies and ceremonies.
In conclusion, taking the above reason into account, I strongly believe that traveling to foreign countries not only helps people to get familiar with diverse assortments of cultures, histories, and rituals but it also encourages them to spend their summer vacation and money in countries having cheap and advanced entertaining activities.
- TPO5People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do. 76
- TPO9- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 88
- famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now 73
- TPO2Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. Agree or disagree? 90
- Which one do you prefer：1) a company offering you a job with a challenging and interesting project but fewer vacation days or2) another company offering you a job that is not so challenging and interesting but more vacation days. 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1165, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
...money effectively and enjoy using those countries technology and amusement hubbies and ce...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, second, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2736.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 503.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4393638171 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75386881712 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530815109344 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 834.3 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.7742066189 48.9658058833 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.285714286 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9523809524 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7619047619 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309775229296 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101688791042 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555834455172 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201299964082 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354186331557 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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