The pie charts below show electricity generation by source in New Zealand andGermany in 1980 and 2010.

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The pie charts below show electricity generation by source in New Zealand and

Germany in 1980 and 2010.

The pie charts illustrate the units of energy generation by source in two different countries, New Zealand and Germany, between 1980 and 2010.

Overall, the total number of units generated in New Zealand was higher than that of Germany. In 2010, while the main energy generation produced in New Zealand was coal, the primary energy generated in Germany was nuclear.

In 1980, the main source energy generated in New Zealand was coal, at 56 units. The figure was double that of Germany, at 28 units. Natural gas and hydro had the same figure, at 30 units, while petroleum accounted for 11 units, in 1980, in New Zealand. In contrast, in Germany, the figures for natural gas, hydro, and petroleum were 28, 7, and 22 units. In addition, Germany had nuclear energy, accounting for 20 units.

In 2010, while the main source of energy generation in New Zealand was coal, at 150 units, nuclear was the highest energy generation in Germany, at 155 units. In New Zealand, petroleum and natural gas had the same figure, at 2 units, and hydro accounted for 46 units. In contrast, while the figures for natural gas and hydro were equal, at 2 units, in Germany, petroleum and coal were 27 and 28 units, respectively.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Line 7, column 160, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...gy generation in Germany, at 155 units. In New Zealand, petroleum and natural gas ...
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Line 7, column 269, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nits, and hydro accounted for 46 units. In contrast, while the figures for natural...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, while, in addition, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1001.0 965.302439024 104% => OK
No of words: 209.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78947368421 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46658026892 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 81.0 106.607317073 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.387559808612 0.547539520022 71% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 304.2 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 19.0 3.36585365854 564% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.0008765223 43.030603864 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0 112.824112599 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 22.9334400587 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.54545454545 5.23603664747 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 3.70975609756 270% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226743418266 0.215688989381 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125912277496 0.103423049105 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126092497398 0.0843802449381 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216120335373 0.15604864568 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118813790621 0.0819641961636 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.2329268293 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 61.2550243902 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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