With the advance in modern technology, people are becoming more socially disconnected. At what extent do you agree or disagree?
In this digital era, social interactions are loosing the appeal it used to have. I strongly agree with the notion of people becoming less socially attached because of my observation on the decreased number of social activities and absence of mindfulness in day to day social contexts. In this essay, I will elaborate this with relevent examples.
Firstly, young men and women do not express as much interest as before towards social activities. To elaborate, they spend most of there leisure time using digital technology instead of hanging out with friends, playing sports and traveling. Recretional activities have started to depend on watching films, playing video games and surfing internet which is isolating individuals of many age vigorously. A case studies conducted by Simon Fraser University has discovered that access to digital devices rise the possibility of being socially disconnected to 42%, the percentage is even higher among the people living in urban areas.
Secondly, digital technology contributes towards lack of mindfulness among the young generation. In other words, young adults are often seen to use their mobile devices to play games or answer messages online ignoring the people sitting next to them. In many cases, they fails to give concentration on their friends conversation because he/she is watching something else on the social media feed. These kind of behaviour slowly make the individuals disconnected from their friends and family. For instance, a research has found that people who use digital technology in regular basis can concentrate 22% less while socializing comparing to the people who are reluctant to the usage of technology.
In contrast, some would argue that social media is connecting people with each other and therefore technology is not culpable for social disconnection. However, social media is discouraging the youth to meet in person, which is ultimately causing difficulties when the young generation are trying to build communication face to face. A recent survey on some school students has shown that students are interested to chat in messenger and whatsapp, and they are not comfortable to hangout in person.
To conclude, it is high time to take necessary steps by the government, policymakers and psychologists to control the usage of technology among the young audience to hold back from building a socially disconnected generation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'losing the'?
Suggestion: losing the
...is digital era, social interactions are loosing the appeal it used to have. I strongly agre...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun age seems to be countable; consider using: 'many ages'.
Suggestion: many ages
...ernet which is isolating individuals of many age vigorously. A case studies conducted by...
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Suggestion:
...among the people living in urban areas. Secondly, digital technology contributes...
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Suggestion: fail
...tting next to them. In many cases, they fails to give concentration on their friends ...
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Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...omething else on the social media feed. These kind of behaviour slowly make the individual...
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Suggestion: research
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...e not comfortable to hangout in person. To conclude, it is high time to take nec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, in contrast, kind of, in many cases, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2049.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 377.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4350132626 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9248840255 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575596816976 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1528522992 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.0625 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5625 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6875 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164523997665 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0503792891264 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532236746121 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0891009164177 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048001146372 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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