Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially, among young people.
Identify the possible causes of this trend , and propose some solutions you think would be effective.
Juvenile delinquency IS considerED increasingLY around the world and starts to APPEAR SERIOUSLY (DONT FORGET LANGUAGE PARALLELISM) . This situation may have reasons tendED TO OCCUR ON AN individual and nation levels and the potential measures to solve the problem could be provided.
Perhaps the major factor is the lack of upbringing and attention to the psychological well-being of children in families. For instant, in some countries due to financial reality, the parents might be concerning about the material security of the family members more than mentality health and atmosphere inside the home. All the time they spend at work and the kids generally take care of themselves alone, therefore, they might be influenced by wrong social behavior. Another factor appears to be in insufficient funding support from the government’s side in obtaining an educational degree and subsequent search for employment. An example can be seen in youth unemployment, which stands on the ground that the youngsters are likely to have difficulty in enrolling INTO colleges and getting enough-paid qualified job without work experience. What is along with unavailable family support may push young individuals on committing a crime.
REGARDING SOME possible solutions and obvious steps, it would be VIABLE to increase the awareness in the community about the value of backing and deep friendly conversation between elders and children. Appealing to this side of family relationships induces young people to relive in the home environment, rather than on the streets. If this step was taken, it would greatly enhance the confidence of the authorities in revealing the power of the family institute. The second remedy might be readdressing of the state budget for full or part funding of work-experienced and university courses for youngsters. If such courses and internships were more affordable, It would reduce the unproductive occupation of adolescents. So, they may well feel a connection with society and would want more to CONVERT it INTO a profit.
It is logical to conclude that the main causes of the young crime are supposed to initiate from two completed sides either on a relatives’ and on governmental layers. It seems that cooperative efforts and complex methods should perhaps resolve the phenomenon.
- The use of violence in music lyrics and, video games and films seen by children is causing concern in many societies. What problems may be caused by this type of violent imagery, and what steps could be taken to lessen the impact on young people? 84
- In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment.What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it? 73
- Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have no intention of doing this. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion 89
- Some employers offer their employees subsidised membership of gyms and sports clubs, believing that this will make their staff healthier and thus more effective at work. Other employers see no benefit in doing so. Consider the arguments from both aspects 84
- The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia 89
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, regarding, second, so, therefore, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1965.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 361.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4432132964 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09747354441 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620498614958 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4618272135 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.8125 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5625 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.9375 7.06120827912 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221035923754 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599319245054 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0317553834114 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114497022776 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036703197927 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.06 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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