The argument claims that the decrease in the number of deer is related to the current global warming trend. Stated in this way the argument: reveals examples of leap of faith, poor reasoning and ill-defined terminology and fails to mention several key factors, on the basis of which it could be evaluated. The conclusion of the argument relies on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence. Hence, the argument is unconvincing and has several flaws.
First, the argument readily states that the deer population is dropping. This statement is a stretch since it does not provide any statistical evidence to prove the point. Suppose, for example, how many deer was there last year compared to the deer population in the current year or the decreasing trend in the number of deer during the last three years. Clearly, the statement is not quantified. The argument could have been much clearer if it explicitly stated that how bad is the situation happening.
Second, the argument claims that global warming is the cause of melted sea ice so the deer could not travel over the ice to find food. This is again a very weak and unsupported claim as the argument does not demonstrate any correlation between global warming and migration patterns of this animal. Even if the sea ice is melting because of global warming, not all the sea ice is congruent; is all the ice melting too small that the deer could not travel over them? If the argument had provided evidence that indicating specifically how does global warming negatively affect the migration patterns of the deer then the argument would have been a lot more convincing.
Finally, the statement is still ambiguous in many aspects. Could the source of information be genuine and confirmed? What if the deer populations are declining due to illegal hunting? What if global warming harms the growth of the plants which are feed of the deer and leads to a food shortage, consequently many deer are starving? Without convincing answers to these questions, one is left with the impression that the claim is more of wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence.
In conclusion, the argument is flawed for the above-mentioned reasons and is therefore unconvincing. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the relevant facts to support the conclusion that global warming is the direct cause of the decrease in the number of deer in arctic regions.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 407 350
No. of Characters: 1989 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.492 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.887 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.664 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.35 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.525 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.539 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 466, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...at the deer could not travel over them? If the argument had provided evidence that...
^^
Line 7, column 106, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the source of information be genuine and confirmed? What if the deer populations ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, hence, if, second, so, still, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2042.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 407.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0171990172 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75302054472 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471744471744 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0861563875 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.1 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.35 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128574922665 0.218282227539 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0388641934322 0.0743258471296 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0434877724298 0.0701772020484 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0755437653494 0.128457276422 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0144979828117 0.0628817314937 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.