Some people think playing computer games are a waste of time for children. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?. Use specific details and examples to support your opinion.
Games are now one of the most hobbies that all people enjoy playing them. Game have dis advantages, if we play it more than one hour every day, however, it also has advantages like enjoying time with our friends. One of the most popular kinds of games are computer games as well as is so attractive for young children. Though some people think playing computer games is not a waste of time, from my perspective, it is detrimental and has many disadvantages.
The first reason why i believe it is a waste of time because playing computer games spend money as well as well as make weak visions. First, it makes children's visions weak. As all know, watching screen of computers with high light make weak our vision and children do not know to make less the light of the screen, therefore, when they are at a very young age, their vision become weak. Second, playing computer games resulted for spending money or effecting family economy. For instance, when i was a young age, i liked to play games. My family did not have good economy to buy for me a computer to play game at home, so because i was interested in playing game, i take money from my father and go to game net. I spend about 150 Afghani every day. In fact, I spend a lot of money every day that hurts my family economy as a whole.
The second reason why i believe playing computer game is detrimental because it do not let children to study. They become busy with playing games and forget to study their lessons. For instance, when i was a child, at first, i was an intelligent student in my class, but when my father bought me a computer as well as several CD's of computer games. After that time i do not study. When i came at home from school, i ate lunch, then i go through my computer until the night and do not open my books to review my lessons, as a result my score at school become lower due to computer games take me busy.
The third reason, i think it is detrimental because it is detrimental. I mean playing computer games do not have any advantages since there is no advantage for some thing, why we should do that? instead, we can some other things such as playing football, studying or playing cheese which is useful for us.
To sum up, it is recommended that playing computer game is detrimental due to it has disadvantages such as, waste of time, take us away from our lessons, makes weak children's vision as well as spend children's money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, third, well, for instance, i mean, i think, in fact, such as, as a result, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
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Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1992.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45637583893 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.547887282 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447427293065 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.915647473 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8571428571 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 24.0 5.5376344086 433% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301414492206 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111442735453 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647821944146 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199667216463 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0447474404841 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.51 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.