Rate of diabetes and obesity are increasing in many countries around the world. Some people think that governments should ban soft drinks and sugary snack from schools. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this proposal?
With the rising amount of both diabetes and obesity across the world, there are people suggest that any sugary consumable goods, such as soft drink and sugary snacks should be ban from school ground. This essay disagree on banning sugary consumable goods. Firstly, this essay will discuss the fact that sugary consumption goods are not the only factor that can cause diabetes and obesity and secondly, discuss how nutrition education is more important than banning sugary good completely.
The causes of diabetes and obesity are vary among the subjects. Commonly, by in take too much calories per day for a long period, is one of the major cause of both diabetes and obesity. In additional, consuming only sugary goods are not only the single cause of diabetes as well as obesity instead it is one of factors. There are multiple factor involving such as neglecting on exercise, which is one of the activities for reducing intake calories. Moreover, having a bad eating habit, which can result on intake too much calories per day, as a result usually will lead to suffer from obesity and diabetes.
Increasing concern over nutrition than completely banning should do more benefit. Education about nutrition serve in a long run, by banning sugary good might be working only in school ground. Even if soft drink and sugary snacks are eliminate from school, these can be obtain outside school certainly. However, if school start on giving children an education, such as how to important healthy diet is or how diabetes and obesity can affect your life. Those educations have a chance to be children reminder and help shape their eating habits.
In conclusion, sugary consumptions good should not be banned from school because they are not the only factors that made obesity as well as diabetes, instead school should increase more concern about providing a lesson for good eating habits.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 177, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'banned'?
Suggestion: banned
... soft drink and sugary snacks should be ban from school ground. This essay disagree...
^^^
Line 1, column 212, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'disagrees'.
Suggestion: disagrees
...d be ban from school ground. This essay disagree on banning sugary consumable goods. Fir...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 40, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'varied'.
Suggestion: varied
... The causes of diabetes and obesity are vary among the subjects. Commonly, by in tak...
^^^^
Line 2, column 89, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... the subjects. Commonly, by in take too much calories per day for a long period, is ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 340, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'factors'?
Suggestion: factors
...t is one of factors. There are multiple factor involving such as neglecting on exercis...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 518, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...g habit, which can result on intake too much calories per day, as a result usually w...
^^^^
Line 2, column 553, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[10]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put between 'will' and 'lead'.
Suggestion: will usually lead
... too much calories per day, as a result usually will lead to suffer from obesity and diabetes. I...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 233, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'eliminated'.
Suggestion: eliminated
...ven if soft drink and sugary snacks are eliminate from school, these can be obtain outsid...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1574.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02875399361 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41994590149 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501597444089 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8666871641 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.428571429 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3571428571 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07142857143 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279407589803 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106107360172 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0884161648993 0.0667982634062 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184580917491 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0817977065555 0.056905535591 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 177, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'banned'?
Suggestion: banned
... soft drink and sugary snacks should be ban from school ground. This essay disagree...
^^^
Line 1, column 212, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'disagrees'.
Suggestion: disagrees
...d be ban from school ground. This essay disagree on banning sugary consumable goods. Fir...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 40, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'varied'.
Suggestion: varied
... The causes of diabetes and obesity are vary among the subjects. Commonly, by in tak...
^^^^
Line 2, column 89, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... the subjects. Commonly, by in take too much calories per day for a long period, is ...
^^^^
Line 2, column 340, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'factors'?
Suggestion: factors
...t is one of factors. There are multiple factor involving such as neglecting on exercis...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 518, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...g habit, which can result on intake too much calories per day, as a result usually w...
^^^^
Line 2, column 553, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[10]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put between 'will' and 'lead'.
Suggestion: will usually lead
... too much calories per day, as a result usually will lead to suffer from obesity and diabetes. I...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 233, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'eliminated'.
Suggestion: eliminated
...ven if soft drink and sugary snacks are eliminate from school, these can be obtain outsid...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1574.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02875399361 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41994590149 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501597444089 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8666871641 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.428571429 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3571428571 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07142857143 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279407589803 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106107360172 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0884161648993 0.0667982634062 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184580917491 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0817977065555 0.056905535591 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.