using ipad in school
In today's progressive and sophisticated world where we live, no one can turn a blind eye to the significant effect of the new technology in our life. The vast majority of people may be inclined toward the use of these new devices in their kid's life. While on the other end of the rope, we can find the other kind of people who believe in social life is more preferable for their kids to build new skills. In my perspective, the opponent's opinion looks rational and in the following article, I will elaborate on my point of view cogently.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is the negative effect of these new devices in our kid's mentality and brain development. Recently, I attend a parent conference in my son's school regarding this issue and to vote if the parents prefer their kids to use tablets at school or depend on the regular ways in education. Most of the parents voted for the traditional ways of learning rather than the use of new devices in class. Their point of view is that when kids contact with each other more, that will allow them to learn and know new skills and information.
Another noteworthy point to be mentioned in the same issue is the high expenses if the school decided to buy new tablets for students, While they can use this money to develop something more useful to the children like providing the classes with more clarification posters or supply the garden with more toys and activity devices for their recess. I can use my son's experience to explain my point of view. Recently, the schools collect a good amount of donation's money and they ask the children about their desire or plan to expend this money. Most of the students vote for buying a new monkey bar in the garden in addition to a basketball zone.
To wrap it up, all the after-mentioned points lead us to the conclusion that even if the new devices are important in the new era, but, it is better to keep our kids away from these small portable screens which affect them directly or indirectly. Playing with their friends could be considered as one of the most preferable ways to build a healthy and strong brain and body.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'opponents'' or 'opponent's'?
Suggestion: opponents'; opponent's
...uild new skills. In my perspective, the opponents opinion looks rational and in the follo...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d a healthy and strong brain and body.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, may, regarding, so, while, in addition, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67447916667 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51741843206 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.1232631623 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.214285714 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4285714286 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92857142857 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134178771779 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0509213789452 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0669944064047 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0842059861144 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0690144056202 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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