There are several aspects that make up successful lives. While some people value efforts and determination over other things, others believe financial elements and good appearance are more crucial. In my perspective, all of them are equally integral.
It is undeniable that financial aspects and good appearance play crucial roles in people's life. In terms of money, if people were born in wealthy families, they would meet their demand and have better educations. This means that their families could support them to progress faster in reaching success. In terms of beauty, fashion and advertisement industries have thriven in modern society, thus people could utilize their beauty to contribute to these industries such as fashion models or commercial endorsement. In fact, these jobs not only boost their reputation but also help them to earn a living.
On the other hand, making efforts and determination is the key role leading to success. The fundamental reason is that not everyone is fortunate enough to be born in wealthy families or beautiful appearance, thus they should work hard to achieve their goals. Nick Vujic can be given as an example, without legs and hands, he graduated with double degrees and traveled all around the world to inspire people to work harder. The other reason is that hard-working can help people to make extraordinary things by exceeding their limits. For instance, Thomas Edison, who is a famous inventor, succeeded to invent the electric light bulb after hundreds of times failed.
In conclusion, good appearance and financial support are good foundations to help people progress faster while the efforts and determination they make are the key roles in the process of achieving success. It is recommended that people should work harder to pursue their goals however who they are.
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Essay reference notes: This topic is refereed from another essay topic, developed by user: Ngoc Nguyen
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1533.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23208191126 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68970563786 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576791808874 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3950771002 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.2 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5333333333 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217082549754 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737890684434 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0727466747922 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146328752135 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521317986456 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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