Advertising which can be seen everywhere in daily life influences what people think and has negative effects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The proliferation of contemporary lifestyles has brought about several socio-economic debates. For instance, modern advertisement industry is believed to cause serious mental damages to its audiences. From my point of view, I wholeheartedly concur with this notion for various reasons which will be discussed below.
First, the underlying reason for my belief is that advertising campaigns might deliver inappropriate contents and violent visuals. Since advertising programs are broadcasted nationally through popular communication channels such as televisions and mobile phones, the censor boards find it hard to fully control and take actions promptly with substandard information. In fact, despite the European authorities’ s efforts on abandoning violence contents on public media and restricting censorship regulations, according to their report in the early 2017, there was more than 70% family-movie websites appeared sensitive and horror games advertising like Lord of Legends or Wargame.
Second, another factor contributing to my standpoint is that these advertising might blind its customers and viewers by overrating the companies ’s products. If a company wants to raise sales and gain great attention from the public, they need to persuade the potential customers that their products are among the best in the market, so they create a advertising campaigns with false praises about the products. For example, in July 2017, a number of Western clothing companies received criticism and negative feedbacks about the great differences between their real products and online images.
In conclusion, I hold true to my belief that advertising industry has badly affected human mental health. In other words, the advertising disadvantages literally outweighed its advantages due to several explanations above.
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| 2020-03-16 | Louisa Pham | 11 | view |
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 350, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... the best in the market, so they create a advertising campaigns with false praise...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1566.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.88721804511 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11841595399 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.691729323308 0.561755894193 123% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.8258755231 49.4020404114 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.363636364 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1818181818 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.27272727273 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0706875459947 0.244688304435 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0267227492151 0.084324248473 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0126604162881 0.0667982634062 19% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0429545216091 0.151304729494 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00718291997034 0.056905535591 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.18 12.4159519038 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.64 8.58950901804 124% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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