Do you agree that people should always participate in the activities that they are good at or talented in?
In today’s crowded world people need to pay more attention to themselves. If we know our self we can live better and also help others too, one way to achieve this for us is that we know our talents and passions. In this way we will have an important impact in our societies.
Some people believes that talent is inheritance, but other believe that we can achive it during our life. There are many examples for both claims. But I support the later claim. You can find your passion in different stage of your personal life. And when you participate in an activity that is your favorite you will do it more efficient compare to others, even recent studies approve my sentence. When you start a job that is your goal for a while you can improve in it; in a faster pace and this usually ended very good for individuals who follow this path. An example for this is Cristiano Ronaldo, he himself admited that when he started football, there were people who keep saying to him that he can not become a professional football player but he followed his passion and did what he was good at; and now he is an idol for lots of kids around the globe.
The next reason is about time, it is an ineviteble fact that we do not have all the time that we wished for. So by keeping this fact in our mind we have to be more precise and carefull about our choices, because these choices can either elevate us or destroy us. so although some people might choose the low risk options, I prefer to choose an option that I’m good at. And spend my time in it because this way I feel more relaxed and less anxious. In the end if you ask an eldery what is the biggest regret of your life, one of the first things he or she says is this fact that do not waste your time on things that are not your passion.
In conclusion, the world is a big place and in this place you got two options to follow; one is easier than the other So it is your responsibility to choose carefully and follow a path that you fell it’s suit you the most. Maybe it’s sound cliche but you have to follow your dreams and believe me in the end you are the person who became an important in his fields.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, while, i feel, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 88.0 43.0788530466 204% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1743.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.22033898305 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.18420458458 2.67179642975 82% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503631961259 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.3944131246 48.9658058833 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.529411765 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2941176471 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47058823529 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158269483781 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0518881483518 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484257116179 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0941248641841 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045455702751 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 58.1214874552 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.49 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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