Many sports players advertise sport-related products.
Whether advantages outweighs the disadvantages of this?
Undoubtedly, there is an escalating count of endorsements through famous sports personalities.
Even though these commercials inspire the young ones to indulge themselves into active lifestyles,still
the assets associated with these sort of advertisements outscoure the prejudices as these promotional
activities would pave the path of artificial demands which would disturb the financial budget of people.
By ill luck,the adverts by sports men gives the birth to artificial demands and force the younger people to
spend lavishly on expensive branded items which do not have any realistic necessities .Seemingly, the
sports celebrities make fake claim about the benefits of sports material ,owing to immaturity and indecisiveness
among children they easily gravitate towards the unrealistic claims. Consequently, inorder to acquire costly branded
products ,adolescents put undue pressure on the monthly budget of their parents.To exemplify,the survey conducted
in the gone calendar year by 'New York Times' that the commercials of energy drinks by famous sports people allure the
innocent children to spend large portion of their pocket money on these drinks which do not have any relation with enhancing
stamina.
The sports men depicts their skills and strategies through advertisements which are imitated by youngster at
home as they usually have unique craze to follow their favourite sports star.Thus, these commercials motiavte
the young people to actively participate in the sports and lead active lifestyles.Also,it is biased to overlook the fact
published by American Child Welfare Council that 90 percent children replicate the action of their sports celebrities and
indulge in the sports with full enthusiasm.Therefore,the sports related advert is impeccable measure to encourage the
juveniles to actively participate in the sports.
To conclude, although the advertisment lure young people and intensify their spending on fake products,the merits of
spreading awareness regarding sports among people cannot be over shadowed.Mass adverts appeal the attenion of people and
channelized their energy into productive purposes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, look, regarding, so, still, therefore, thus, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1874.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 6.02572347267 5.12529762239 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22300395114 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585209003215 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 51.0 20.2975951904 251% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 161.968789861 49.4020404114 328% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 312.333333333 106.682146367 293% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 51.8333333333 20.7667163134 250% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.6666666667 7.06120827912 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 20.0 4.38176352705 456% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 26.0 5.01903807615 518% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211234253226 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107932260117 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0592465038753 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0648188522828 0.151304729494 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0562975881258 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 32.9 13.0946893788 251% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 2.79 50.2224549098 6% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.44779559118 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.5 11.3001002004 226% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 18.58 12.4159519038 150% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.55 8.58950901804 134% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 78.4519038076 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.5 9.78957915832 220% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 22.4 10.1190380762 221% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 22.0 10.7795591182 204% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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