Nowadays, we can watch entertainment performance from the screen (laptop, etc) and no need to watch it live. To what extend do you agree?
There is an opinion that today in the Internet era, people are able to watch any show online and it is not necessary to attend a live performance. I completely disagree with this point of view because live concert or theatrical performance is absolutely different experience than watching it on the screen.
First, any kind of entertainment performance includes communication and interaction with other beholders. Attending a live event a person has a sense of conclusion and they can literary feel themselves as a part of something important and exceptional. For instance, once I have visited a concert of “Nickel back” and there was a sensation of wonder in the air. As well as this, I was a part of a like-minded team involved in creation of something unusual. Actually, participation in live rock concert really pumped me up and I was ready to conquer the world afterwards.
In addition, such kind activities as live performances plays significant role in relieving social stress. I mean that citizens being isolated become quite aggressive or tend to feel depressed, however attending live shows people will release their negative emotions. At the first place, human beings are social animals and entertainment online programs are not able replace the live events. In fact spending too much time in front of the screen may increase the level of loneliness and desperation.
In conclusion, I totally disagree that viewing entertainment performances on the screen is enough and eliminates the requirement to attend live events. In my opinion, nowadays our society demands even more interactions that are social and live events.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 571, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... ready to conquer the world afterwards. In addition, such kind activities as liv...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 153, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... the requirement to attend live events. In my opinion, nowadays our society demand...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, however, if, may, really, so, well, for instance, i mean, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1382.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23484848485 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07930084011 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.609848484848 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.1603619761 49.4020404114 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 106.307692308 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3076923077 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2307692308 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186645352968 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0622920630261 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455382115804 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117631379638 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041882391648 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 571, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... ready to conquer the world afterwards. In addition, such kind activities as liv...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 153, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... the requirement to attend live events. In my opinion, nowadays our society demand...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, however, if, may, really, so, well, for instance, i mean, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1382.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23484848485 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07930084011 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.609848484848 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.1603619761 49.4020404114 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 106.307692308 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3076923077 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2307692308 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186645352968 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0622920630261 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455382115804 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117631379638 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041882391648 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.