“Over the past two years, the numbers of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many central plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to increase no. of skateboard users in plaza. there has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in central plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that the business in central plaza will return to its previously high numbers.”
The owner of Central Plaza concludes, that the escalating popularity of Skateboarding has negatively affected the business of Plaza due to which the numbers of shoppers have gone been depleting. The recommendation he puts seem plausible but, the premises author cites to come to conclusion are rather cursory, and cogently does not make a proper justification for the conclusion. So, before jumping into the conclusion, the author needs to answer three questions.
First and foremost, are they the same individuals who shifted from shopping at plaza to skateboarding? The author assumes, without evidence, that the shoppers who come to Plaza are the same ones that shifted to Skateboarding as the author mentions that prohibition of Skateboarding can make Plaza’s business as it was before. However, this might not be the case. They might not be same individuals, or perhaps they recently have shifted near to the plaza, who are not even keen enthusiast of shopping. If any of these scenarios has merit, then the author’s claim is unwarranted.
Furthermore, can rise in skateboarding number be only attributed for the decline in business of Plaza? The author prematurely does not account any other factors that might have brought the business down. For instance, there is a possibility of onset of another Plaza with similar characteristics, or perhaps individual belief on the central plaza has diminished due to its recent controversy, and opted not to shop there. So, the blame for the fall of plaza cannot be solely given to skateboarding. If either of case is true, then the author’s contention does not hold water. The author also mentions about the increase in litter and vandalism that has hampered its business. But, if this is the reason then, he forgets to clarify why the business of Skateboarding hasn’t been on the downside. Also, residents might have started to move out from the place due to increase in vandalism, whereas the author seems to have forgotten to take this factor into account.
Finally, the author believes that only the prohibition of skateboarding can increase Plaza’s business to its new height. However, during the two years’ period, things like economic fallout can occur, or perhaps people’s will for shopping might have gone down. It is also likely that the people have switched their interest to somewhere else, may be for investment. The author also mentions about the increase in litter and vandalism that has hampered its business. But, if this is the reason then, he forgets to clarify why the business of Skateboarding hasn’t been on the downside. Also, residents might have started to move out from the place due to increase in vandalism, whereas the author seems to have forgotten to take this factor into account. Unless, the author does not consider the mentioned scenarios, the argument can be challenged.
In conclusion, it is possible that prohibiting skateboarding can increase Plaza’s business. However, as it stands now, the argument is predicated on three unstated assumptions that leaves the argument specious. Hence, the reason for plaza’s business to go down depends on wide range of domain and cannot solely be attributed to just rise on skateboard enthusiast. Therefore, the author needs to access all these domains and be more thorough in his research about the fall of Plaza’s business come out with powerful premises to bolster the argument.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 556 350
No. of Characters: 2779 1500
No. of Different Words: 228 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.856 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.998 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.747 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 200 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 157 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 115 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.593 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.529 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.815 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.371 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.077 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, whereas, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 55.5748502994 146% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2881.0 2260.96107784 127% => OK
No of words: 554.0 441.139720559 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20036101083 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85151570047 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88757723396 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424187725632 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 887.4 705.55239521 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0943744726 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.703703704 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5185185185 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.74074074074 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235286299976 0.218282227539 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0725561423096 0.0743258471296 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0791605355109 0.0701772020484 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152883124436 0.128457276422 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302273507166 0.0628817314937 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 98.500998004 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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