Practise 8 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make c

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Practise 8:You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.

The provided line graph compares the proportion of visitors to England who visited four attractive sites in Brighton in the period of 20 years between 1980 and 2010.
In general, Art Gallery, Pavilion and Festival experienced a downward trend when only Pier witnessed an upward trend in the percentage of tourists. Despite this, Pavilion was the most popular attraction in Brighton.
From 1980 to 1995, the percentage of tourists to pavilion rose dramatically from 25% to nearly 50% while there was a gradual increase in the proportion of tourists to Festival. In the same period, Art gallery underwent a significant growth by nearly 20% between 1980 and 1985 before falling suddenly after 1985. Meanwhile, the percentage of people to Pier fluctuated.
From 1995 onwards, there was a slight rise in the percentage of tourists to Festival to over 37% in 2000 and it remained the same level until 2010. In contrast, Art gallery and Pavilion saw a substantial drop to over 30% and nearly 10% respectively in 2010. Whereas, Pier visitors’ proportion started to grow sharply from 2000 to 2010.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 258, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...0% and nearly 10% respectively in 2010. Whereas, Pier visitors’ proportion started to g...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, whereas, while, in contrast, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 33.7804878049 124% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 916.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 180.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08888888889 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66284150148 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7905041803 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561111111111 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 261.0 283.868780488 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7011708987 43.030603864 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.777777778 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 22.9334400587 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77777777778 5.23603664747 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141694753732 0.215688989381 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615850212598 0.103423049105 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.071540186339 0.0843802449381 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102987241921 0.15604864568 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0818187397978 0.0819641961636 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 11.4140731707 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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