TPO 40 independent- some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade they get in school. do you think this is a good idea?
Raising children, especially educationally, has been a great challenge for parents who always want the best for their offspring. In this content, there are mutually exclusive ideas regarding whether offering money for kids' high achievements is allowable and acceptable or not. From my point of view, I am inclined to the notion that this approach is plausible even though some adults may oppose it. My answer to this debating bone of contention is twofold, and in the following, the rationale behind it will be elaborated by the most outstanding, solid proofs.
The first and foremost reason which is worth mentioning is that this strategy will make children more eager to try as hard as they can to educationally contribute better and study harder to get higher scores. This notion will make them more ambitious in their future jobs in which they will definitely want to do their best becoming a better worker. To put it into a more vivid picture, researchers in RMIT university, the most renowned knowledge institute of Australia, conducted a survey of Melbourne's employees to whom they disseminated a questionnaire and realized that there is a direct exponential relation between their level of achievements and the number of the times they were awarded by their parents in their childhood. In other words, the more times they were given money, the better they are working in their organisations and firms. This research indicates that children will not put their best in their tasks if they do not recognize the aim of their efforts.
The second and equally far-reaching explanation to bear in mind is that this action will teach the kids to manage their money which is a crucial skill for their future. Providing they understand how to save their money and manage their assets from younger ages, they will know each task has a specific outcome and consequence in their adulthood. As an illustration, my cousin, Ali, was always offered money (small amounts) whenever he did something good in his school. In that age, when most of the kids were used to doing useless hobbies, he learned the meaning of money and saving which helped him to develop this competency when he grew older. Now, he is a well-known asset manager in our city, kerman, who charges people for scores of money working and trading with their capital. Offering money not only made him a successful worker but also taught him how to save and manage both his and others' money.
In conclusion, taking all the aforementioned rationalizations and facts into account, I am prone to the notion that offering money is a satisfactory strategy for developing the kids' skills and competencies although there are some exceptions which can be excluded from the general rule. To recapitulate my opinions, this action not only makes children more eager to struggle for the best in their schools and future roles but also gives them the opportunity to learn how to manage their money which is substantial for their future's success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, regarding, second, so, well, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2494.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97804391218 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73877462575 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518962075848 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 768.6 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.5659802313 48.9658058833 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.705882353 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4705882353 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330564838929 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109853239044 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454945013762 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198083071612 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0135159431592 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 86.8835125448 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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