Some people claim that you can tell whether a nation is great by looking at the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists. Others argue that the surest indicator of a great nation is, in fact, the general welfare of all its people.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The question of how to measure the greatness of a nation is a complicated one. Some believe by looking at the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists can show how a great a nation is. However, a great nation truly is seen by the general welfare of all its people.
First, the achievements of more well-known individuals do not necessarily show the circumstances of others. Take into account the popular Bollywood star Shah Rukh Khan in India. Khan is amongst the most popular and richest actors in the country of India. One of the houses he owns in located in Mumbai, India and is surround by homes/sheds of individuals of those who are struggling make money. India has a high number of individuals in their population living under the poverty line. These people sometimes do not have the money to provide shelter nor food for their families or themselves, so they sleep and beg on the streets. The luxurious life of Khan is an inaccurate representation of the greater picture of the nation. Thus, by specifically looking at the accomplishments of rules, artists, or scientists does not show the greatness of a nation because it does not represent the majority of the nation.
Furthermore, a nation that does not prioritize the welfare of its residents cannot be great nation. For example, China is amongst the leading economies in the world and has the biggest export businesses. But can it be considered a great nation based on these solely these facts? The communist party rules over the Chinese population, making all relevant decisions for the country and its people without the input from the people. From shows aired on the television and radio to books to the internet is monitored and filtered by the government. So, the citizens of China truly have no true picture of the rest of the world and the outside world has inadequate representation of China. Even though, China has successful exporting businesses, it cannot be surely stated the country of China is great because its people are not given freedom of choice nor speech and nor are, we guaranteed their wellness.
Lastly, some may argue that the leaders of a nation have to thrive to ensure the welfare of its individuals, indicating a great nation. Though true to an extent, there is fault to this idea. For instance, Kim Jong Un, the president of South Korea is worshipped by the population of South Korea. Un shows a false representation of himself to the people of South Korea and to the rest of the world. Through what South Korea attempts to display, it seems as Un is a successful leader and their
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 317, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'surrounded'.
Suggestion: surrounded
...owns in located in Mumbai, India and is surround by homes/sheds of individuals of those ...
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Line 3, column 384, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to make'
Suggestion: to make
...individuals of those who are struggling make money. India has a high number of indiv...
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Line 7, column 491, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s as Un is a successful leader and their
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, lastly, look, may, so, thus, well, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2148.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 446.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81614349776 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79226041277 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484304932735 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 670.5 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4974227218 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3913043478 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3913043478 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26086956522 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33242035422 0.243740707755 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0923265785674 0.0831039109588 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115353158398 0.0758088955206 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220030867503 0.150359130593 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120446923337 0.0667264976115 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.