It is undeniable that the extended family is a fundamental part of everyone's life. However, there is a crucial conflict about the importance of the family role between the past and the present. Some people think that the extended family lost its effective role.
Others might believe that their role remains the same.
In my view, I firmly confirm the former viewpoint for several reasons that I will explain In the following essay.
To begin with, the technological progress influenced our relations. In fact, we are becoming more connected to our phones and laptops. As a result, we lost the contact with our families and the warm connection with them.
From my personal experience, I remember when I was young that we frequently go to each others home and organize family meetings. We used to play together, share moments of pleasure and sometimes we spend time listen to our grandfather's adventures. Thus, those moments helped to keep the relationship strong.
This indicates that the new ways of communications have destroyed our relationships.
Another major consideration is that friends become closer than relatives since we share with them a lot of things in common. Sometimes some strangers or superficial friendships could be more helpful than a family member.
For instance, I really find myself more relaxed while talking to a friend than one of our relatives because when dealing with a friend there would be no limitations or fears. In the other hand, while talking to a relative, the conversation usually finishes with a personal judgment which is not the case with friends. Added to that, when I face financial problem I find a more warm welcome from my friends than from a relative.
This clearly depicts that family relations are less effective and we find ourselves more attached to those we meet in the life path.
In a nutshell, the extended family is no longer the essential refuge for a person.
The new advance technologies and friends are contributing more to our lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ent which is not the case with friends. added to that, when I face financial problem ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, really, so, thus, while, for instance, in fact, as a result, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1680.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02994011976 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79822095585 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568862275449 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.849517549 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4210526316 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5789473684 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47368421053 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 11.0 4.53405017921 243% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138800470613 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0447256427232 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513006504597 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0521009803249 0.150856017488 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0612406652894 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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