We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café.
Basically, author believed that opening a café is helpful for Monarch to grow business and better compete with another café Regal even Monarch will need to get arid of children book section to make room for café section.
Let us start to pore over with the first evidence. Monarch bookstore have been known for its wide selections of books on all subjects for over twenty years. It is their selling points and pinpoint. Surely it will lose a large number of customer if they discontinue the children’s book section. Not only it won’t attract children, it also stops some parents who want their children to learn reading habit. Once they are aware of that Monarch will discontinue the children book sections, they are looking for another options which probably thinks Regal is a good idea. Regal has its own café and probably it has children’s book sections even it is not wide selected.
According to the most national census, it told that there is a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Here is another flaw that weakens the argument. Author believed that only children under age ten is interested in children’s book section which seems to skip children that age from 10 to 13 may probably have fun in reading children’s book sections as well. Moreover, the definition of children’s book section is needed to be defined. As a matter of a fact, comics, animation and simple poem are still popular for adult readers, but it may be included in children’s book section.
Thirdly, author mentioned that Regal bookstore opened its own café recently. Assume Monarch is not far away from Regal and they are close enough to pass by if people are walking around, it is not a good idea to open a café by discontinuing the children’s book section for Monarch because people will think these two bookstore are similar and it is no need for them to go both of them.
Overall, the evidences that are provided is mostly likely weaken the argument. Author need to come up with new strong e evidences to support the conclusion. I have attested to evidences do not necessarily lead to the conclusion. Opening a café by discontinuing the children’s book section won’t allow Monarch to attract more customer and better complete with Regal book, which recently opened its own café.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 397 350
No. of Characters: 1869 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.464 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.708 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.455 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 103 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.895 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.744 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.421 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.315 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.082 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 219, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...oints and pinpoint. Surely it will lose a large number of customer if they discontinue the childr...
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Line 2, column 391, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to read'.
Suggestion: to read
...arents who want their children to learn reading habit. Once they are aware of that Mona...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, moreover, so, still, third, thirdly, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1934.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 395.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89620253165 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63107774514 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488607594937 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.4877812262 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.789473684 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7894736842 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.89473684211 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334690907595 0.218282227539 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107931064884 0.0743258471296 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130380388282 0.0701772020484 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219270223856 0.128457276422 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0756933570898 0.0628817314937 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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