Many people view that playing video games as harmless fun while other belive that video games have a positive effect on players. While I I accept that video games affect positively on players in some cases, I partly belive that they are do more harm to people in general and to children in particular.
On the one hand, playing video games boost our creativity, imagination, problem-solving skills and force us to think quickly. In this case, video games are both educational and entertaining. People can experience such mysterious, magical world which is not existed in virtual world, this helps them to unwind, release stress after hard-working hour or an 8-hour studying at school.
On the other hand, video games set us in a sedentary lifestyles so we can glue our eyes to the screen for several hours. This lead to many problems related to health such as obesity, mental diseases,etc. Furthermore, communicating with others on Internet for a long time can decrease our ability to have a face to face conversation in real life. Many youngsters are became addicted to video games so that they are even not attending school lessons or exam revisions.
In conclusion, it seems to me that the potential dangers of video games are more significant then the possible benefits.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 136, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: I
...ave a positive effect on players. While I I accept that video games affect positive...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'done'.
Suggestion: done
...me cases, I partly belive that they are do more harm to people in general and to c...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rd-working hour or an 8-hour studying at school. On the other hand, video games ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , etc
... health such as obesity, mental diseases,etc. Furthermore, communicating with others...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...ation in real life. Many youngsters are became addicted to video games so that they ar...
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Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...ers of video games are more significant then the possible benefits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, then, while, in conclusion, in general, in particular, such as, in some cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1066.0 1615.20841683 66% => OK
No of words: 214.0 315.596192385 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98130841121 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82475343497 4.20363070211 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81462062549 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621495327103 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 337.5 506.74238477 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2960337715 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.6 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7 7.06120827912 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406997289238 0.244688304435 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16524204301 0.084324248473 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129521945684 0.0667982634062 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238010070921 0.151304729494 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110348089467 0.056905535591 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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