WRITING TASK 1 - TEST 4 - CAM 11
The given data illustrates comparable information related to the quantity of visitors and their reactions to ashdown museum between before and after its refurbishment. It is vividly noticed that there is a dramatical rise in the number of travellers and their feelings changed positively.
Look at the chart and the table for more details. With regard to the numerial data of tourists, Ashdown museum witnessed a 1.5 time higher increase of the tickets sold compared with the initial figure 74000 people. Service users also felt more pleasant and satisfied with the quality of museum after it was closed down for redecoration. It is clear that previously, most visitors experienced dissatisfaction on account of some reasons, however, that 40% negative evaluation was then replaced with the satisfied feelings those whose immense satisfaction make up large proportion, which ranked the second with 35% of the total opposing to 15% before refurbishment.moreover, making a comparison with last year, both the percentage of very unpleasant and unpleasant visitors dropped , typically the number of very unpleasant feedbacks was threefold less in the year after renewal.. some of visitors without response kept static by 5% through year.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tion related to the quantity of visitors and their reactions to ashdown museum be...
^^
Line 2, column 778, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...pleasant and unpleasant visitors dropped , typically the number of very unpleasant...
^^
Line 2, column 875, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...threefold less in the year after renewal.. some of visitors without response kept ...
^^
Line 2, column 878, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
...eefold less in the year after renewal.. some of visitors without response kept stati...
^^^^
Line 2, column 878, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the visitors') or simply say ''some visitors''.
Suggestion: some of the visitors; some visitors
...eefold less in the year after renewal.. some of visitors without response kept static by 5% thro...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, look, moreover, second, so, then, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1043.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 191.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46073298429 4.92477711251 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12652306634 2.65546596893 118% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 106.607317073 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65445026178 0.547539520022 120% => OK
syllable_count: 320.4 283.868780488 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 154.601528625 43.030603864 359% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 149.0 112.824112599 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2857142857 22.9334400587 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.23603664747 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.83414634146 52% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.2329268293 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 61.2550243902 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.3012195122 146% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 11.4140731707 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.06136585366 123% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 40.7170731707 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tion related to the quantity of visitors and their reactions to ashdown museum be...
^^
Line 2, column 778, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...pleasant and unpleasant visitors dropped , typically the number of very unpleasant...
^^
Line 2, column 875, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...threefold less in the year after renewal.. some of visitors without response kept ...
^^
Line 2, column 878, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
...eefold less in the year after renewal.. some of visitors without response kept stati...
^^^^
Line 2, column 878, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the visitors') or simply say ''some visitors''.
Suggestion: some of the visitors; some visitors
...eefold less in the year after renewal.. some of visitors without response kept static by 5% thro...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, look, moreover, second, so, then, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1043.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 191.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46073298429 4.92477711251 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12652306634 2.65546596893 118% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 106.607317073 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65445026178 0.547539520022 120% => OK
syllable_count: 320.4 283.868780488 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 154.601528625 43.030603864 359% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 149.0 112.824112599 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2857142857 22.9334400587 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.23603664747 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.83414634146 52% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.2329268293 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 61.2550243902 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.3012195122 146% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 11.4140731707 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.06136585366 123% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 40.7170731707 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.