Some people contend that it is unnecessary for graduated students to try different kinds of work before they have determined what is their lifelong career. However, I hold the opposite view that taking diverse tries has some positive influences for them.
First and foremost, taking totally irrelevant kinds of work is conducive for people to find their interests and targets in their life. It is generally acknowledged that only if people are interested and hold consistent enthusiasm for their careers, their potential capacity would be motivated, thus they are more likely to have a brighter future than other who are not. In the progression of trying diverse jobs, it is no doubt that people would realize what their advantages are and which job is the most suitable for them. To be more specific, as a financial student, I took internships in both securities company and information system department of Red Bull, a celebrated company in producing beverage. My first experience of internship was assistance of superior in securities company, during which what I did was just participating boring conferences and communicating with different kinds of people to answer their question about bond or stock market. I found the jobs there was definitely boring and meaningless. While, during last summer vocation, my father introduced me to the information department, where I started to put some practical skills into practice, like compiling a sample programming to streamline some types of works and utilizing statistic knowledge to deal with problems encountered. Due to such experience in the information department, I realized the jobs would invigorate myself to devote much effort into my job. After that, I determined to change my target and major into Information.
More importantly, another benefit of taking different jobs is helping people to meet the serious and draconian requirements of famous companies. With the rapid development of technology and the internet, in fact, an increasing number of jobs are interrelated. A coveted post does desire a talent with comprehensive knowledge structure than that of a specific field. Go back to the example stated above, before I began my first internship in securities company, I thought that the work there only required me to have financial knowledge. However, in the first day, I was asked to use some computer applications, such as Excel, Word and EViews, to organize the data of clients, while, as a freshman, I had not learnt knowledge and skills like that, thus I could not complete the jobs assigned by immediate superior and felt disappointed. Nevertheless, when I stepped into the information department, my colleague was so nice that he helps me to gain how to use those applications smoothly, which strikingly improved my efficiency in working. In this case, I realized that a seemingly irrelevant job would be able to teach me some skills needed for another jobs.
In a nutshell, I still remain that before deciding the career, anyone needs to try something different and they can benefit from this experience.
- It is more fun to see a movie in the cinema with other people than see a movie at home 87
- It is primarily through our identification with social groups that we define ourselves Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing an 92
- As we acquire more knowledge things do not become more comprehensible but more complex and mysterious Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take I 50
- Some people believe that society should try to save every plant and animal species despite the expense to humans in effort time and financial well being Others believe that society need not make extraordinary efforts especially at a great cost in money an 79
- Do you think that young people should take several different kinds of job before they take a career in a long term 90
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 598, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'securities'' or 'security's'?
Suggestion: securities'; security's
...ial student, I took internships in both securities company and information system departme...
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Line 7, column 147, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... they can benefit from this experience.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, thus, while, in fact, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2595.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22132796781 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99209445981 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531187122736 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 819.0 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.7050827162 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.578947368 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1578947368 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42105263158 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170387195971 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0568404214136 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0570134625776 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128058113117 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0360513514704 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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