In a world ehcih has become more and more technologically sophisticated, some people point out that subjects like music and part should not be taught anymore, since they don not reflect the needs our society requires. Although it is true that our everydaylife relies on technologies much more than in the past, cutting down on art and music does not basically make sense.
One one hand, people need arts. Thousands have passed since our ancestors depicted scenes of hunting on the wall of a cave and although they had to struggle with surviving, they felt the need to leave a fingerprint of their existence on this planet. Today, not much has changed. Our priority is not more surviving, but we feel sometimes the need to escape from reality and to feed our soul and this can happen only trough arts: it can be a book, a painting, a song.
Therefore, cutting art from school program could be a fatal error.
On the other hand, practically speaking, around art and music revolves a world made of interests, money, ambitions, schools, in one word, an economy. Painter need pencils and paper to draw, musicians need musical instruments. Not to mention, the weight of another industry such as the movie industry which creates revenues in the order of millions of dollars.
To sum up, it would be not only completely wrong to cancel arts program but I think that children should be encouraged to cultivate their artistic side.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: One
...music does not basically make sense. One one hand, people need arts. Thousands have ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, therefore, i think, such as, it is true, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1185.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 245.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83673469388 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62092308502 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.612244897959 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 357.3 506.74238477 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.3208229997 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.727272727 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2727272727 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45454545455 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147611947827 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0504244824216 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417118588342 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0839244253213 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386960272411 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.4159519038 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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