The lecturer discouraged the usage of social media by mentioning the risks associated with it. Whereas the passage supports the use of social media by highlighting the way social media has changed the peoples lives.
According the passage ,with the advent of social media and new technologies that made it possible for the people to interact with the people from all over the world and they are building bonds and relationships with a wide variety of people .However the lecturer points out the harms of using the social media by explaining the ways how peoples personal information and confidential information can be stealed through varies forms cyber activities Like the fishing.
Secondly the lecturer states that the people are having less number of close friends with whom they can share the personal information by supporting his claims by mentioning the analysis from a survey conducted by duke university sociologists which says that average number of close acquintences of people have reduced from 3 in 1985 to 2 in 2004.The passage didn’t argue on this claims instead it choose to support the social media by mentioning the how the people are able to meet the people of similar tastes.
The lecturer also points out that online communities shared interests are short lived and it’s only the communities that we have around us will live with us forever.On this point the passage doesn’t make any remarks.
In this way the lecturer and the passage explain the merits and demerits of using social media respectively without particularly pointing fingers at each other. Whereas the lecture focuses mainly on risks, the reading passage focuses on convincing the reader that the rewards outweigh the risks.
- The widespread phenomenon of mass communication through cell phones and the internet has spurred enormous controversy Many believe that people have become less able to build bonds with friends and family members It is impossible to deny that social media 78
- The widespread phenomenon of mass communication through cell phones and the internet has spurred enormous controversy Many believe that people have become less able to build bonds with friends and family members It is impossible to deny that social media 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...h the people from all over the world and they are building bonds and relationship...
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...ationships with a wide variety of people .However the lecturer points out the harm...
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...ionships with a wide variety of people .However the lecturer points out the harms of us...
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...rgue on this claims instead it choose to support the social media by mentioning t...
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...ave around us will live with us forever.On this point the passage doesn’t make any...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, second, secondly, so, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 10.4613686534 48% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1444.0 1373.03311258 105% => OK
No of words: 280.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15714285714 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62941562531 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 145.348785872 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539285714286 0.540411800872 100% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 419.366225166 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 13.0662251656 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 21.2450331126 188% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 160.987894082 49.2860985944 327% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 206.285714286 110.228320801 187% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.0 21.698381199 184% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 7.06452816374 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 4.19205298013 334% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197959234444 0.272083759551 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0931704499825 0.0996497079465 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0633490078733 0.0662205650399 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111035877501 0.162205337803 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657448945965 0.0443174109184 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.9 13.3589403974 171% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.88 53.8541721854 57% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 11.0289183223 171% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.24 12.2367328918 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.42419426049 110% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 63.6247240618 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.7273730684 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.498013245 171% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.2008830022 170% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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