The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily
decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central
Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of
skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of
litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit
skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that
business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to
decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how
the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author argue and conclude that skateboarding is the cause of business decrease in central park with and also the cause of litering and vandalism, hence conclude that skateboarding should be prohibited to increase sales at central park. This argument leave alot of questions unaswered, therby need to be address before we can conclude whether probition will have a postive or negative ipact on the business plaza at central.
Firstly, the first that need to be answer is what can cause decrease in business sales at central park. Some importasn factors can cause decrease in business such as the economic, waether, or government policies. For example the central might be facing a huge ecomic blow which can make people to be more frugal and thereby reducing shooping to essential things only. The weather also might be too harsh for people to go out hence reduce the frequent shooping from the central plaza. Another issue that can cause decrease in shopper is government policies such as increase in value added tax, increase in price of goods etc. These points need need to be answered by the author before we can conclude whether it is skateboarding that is causing decrease in shoppers or any afro mentioned points.
The author also make assumption that skateboarding is the causes of decrease in shoppers in skate boradding without supporting the claim with any evidence. The author needs to anwer two question which are, is there any corrrelation between skateboarding and business slaes in central park?, are all shops in central park also apssing throgh decrease of sales or some certian shops?.
This argument is a weak and unspported claim also beacuse it fail to correlate to demonstrtate the correlation between skateboarding and litering and vandalism. The author need to answer the question whether skateboarding is the causes of vandalism or another thing entirely?. This nned to backed up with a concrete eveidence such as survey, direct observation or experiment.
The author also must answer the question why he suggest banning skateboarding for bussiness to increase without catering for vandalism and littering?. This reconmendarion makes a wide guess and a scope shift which is flood with logically unsound arguemt and therby need some questions mentioned aboved to be answerd before we determine whether the recomendation will be eeffrective or not.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 384 350
No. of Characters: 1961 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.427 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.107 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.762 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 150 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.342 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.382 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.382 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.171 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 638, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: need
...ase in price of goods etc. These points need need to be answered by the author before we ...
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Line 4, column 24, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...certian shops?. This argument is a weak and unspported claim also beacuse it f...
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Line 4, column 46, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...argument is a weak and unspported claim also beacuse it fail to correlate to de...
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Line 4, column 63, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...k and unspported claim also beacuse it fail to correlate to demonstrtate the co...
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Line 4, column 65, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fails'?
Suggestion: fails
... and unspported claim also beacuse it fail to correlate to demonstrtate the correl...
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Line 4, column 190, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
...nd vandalism. The author need to answer the question whether skateboarding is the causes of vandalis...
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Line 5, column 49, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'suggests'.
Suggestion: suggests
...or also must answer the question why he suggest banning skateboarding for bussiness to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, so, another thing, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1996.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 384.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19791666667 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80900631773 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473958333333 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0444229944 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.066666667 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176226373722 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069201292577 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052375580037 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106384138979 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067118518048 0.0628817314937 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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