Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get the secure a job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I absolutely agree with that statement, because think if people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. I hold this view because of several reasons. First, if people do not get a opportunity about their job and wait for a better situation, probably they miss the current opportunity. Second, to me, there is no good job and bad job, which makes a difference between the quality of jobs, is people's interests and their aspects to those jobs, so one's can get success in each job that he is professional in that.
According to my point of view, if people do not get a opportunity about their job and wait for a better occasion, they may miss the present opportunity. In other words, people should evaluate their current and available opportunities efficiently, because probably there will not be a better opportunity for them in the future. For instance, when I was 26 years old and I had graduated newly from my university in mechanical engineering, I was searching for a good opportunity to find a job. My father suggested that it is better for me to apply for employment exam of Refinery Complex of Tabriz, which was interested in absorbing mechanical engineering in that time, but I refused to accept my father's suggestion, because I thought that being employer in governmental organizations is not appropriate because of their low payment. So I decided to look for a better opportunities, but I never found a better one, because United States put some financial sanctions in my country, which affected our society so bad. Therefore I was regretful about refusing that opportunity and even today I blame my self because of doing that.
Moreover, it seems to me that we should not differentiate between jobs, and consider a certain job as a good opportunity, and other jobs as a bad opportunities. Which makes a difference between jobs, is the quality of them. To illustrate, some people prefer to look at a particular job as a good opportunity, while other ones consider a same job as ordinary. What is important in choosing job, is being enthusiastic and eager about that job, also people should follow their profession while they are looking for a job.
Generally, I agree with that if people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...al reasons. First, if people do not get a opportunity about their job and wait fo...
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... my point of view, if people do not get a opportunity about their job and wait fo...
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...unity to find a job. My father suggested that it is better for me to apply for em...
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...xam of Refinery Complex of Tabriz, which was interested in absorbing mechanical e...
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Suggestion: Therefore,
...try, which affected our society so bad. Therefore I was regretful about refusing that opp...
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...od opportunity, and other jobs as a bad opportunities. Which makes a difference between jobs,...
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Suggestion: to job
...ordinary. What is important in choosing job, is being enthusiastic and eager about ...
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...re job, they should take it right away.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1955.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77995110024 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93427056478 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.464547677262 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.9 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.23967083 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.333333333 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2666666667 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.13333333333 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382716438561 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163257512058 0.076458572812 214% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.17130024886 0.0737576698707 232% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.321851911532 0.150856017488 213% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.145522592564 0.0645574589148 225% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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