The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The statement is one i would partially agree with but not to a great extent. Cooperation is a good quality that must be instilled in the young people as it brings about development and peace, however, not the extent of negating or neglecting healthy competition. For example, when young ones see that there is a prize for coming first in an examination, students tend to work harder and even go to extra mile to put in effort they would not of put in is there was no prize.
Secondly, cooperation brings about peace but where there is no healthy competition, the young ones become lazy and that can be detrimental for the future generation. For example, few years ago, the boss the restaurant where i worked, changed the company policy to make everyone earn equally, irrespective of how much sales they make, people were initially happy to hear about the equal opportunity but after the first two month, there was a noticeable decline in the monthly sales of the top ranking sales rep as they now feel less motivated.
Thirdly, idea of cooperation without competition might be good culturally but for industrial leadership, it is not the best idea. In industries, there s competition among several industries especially those with similar goals or who offers similar service. For such industries to remain relevant, they must be willing to compete. Young ones need to be prepared for such challenge. It may be argued that cooperation with members of staff of your company will put the company in good shape to stay ahead of other institutions, however that sense of competition will not be available when mostly needed if the society fail to encourage healthy competition from on set.
Fourtly, leadership in govt requires relating with other countries in terms of trade and other social engagement, sense of cooperation will help the society to be in one accord but sense of competition prepares you for the tougher days and instill the characters that put you ahead of any challenge when they arise. Sense of cooperation will only help you to stay together during the challenging days but may not give you the intellectual capacity to easily surmount
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- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree wi 58
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
The statement is one i would partially agree with but not to a...
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Line 1, column 310, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ample, when young ones see that there is a prize for coming first in an examinati...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ears ago, the boss the restaurant where i worked, changed the company policy to m...
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Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ryone earn equally, irrespective of how much sales they make, people were initially ...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...ual opportunity but after the first two month, there was a noticeable decline in the ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ey now feel less motivated. Thirdly, idea of cooperation without competition ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, for example, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1797.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 365.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92328767123 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75264079349 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534246575342 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.6091981094 60.3974514979 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.75 118.986275619 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4166666667 23.4991977007 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 5.21951772744 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274800106642 0.243740707755 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107390179241 0.0831039109588 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595890442306 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163043702188 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0684780401881 0.0667264976115 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.8420337079 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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