You are not happy with the course you are doing at a college and would like to change to a different course. Write a letter to the course supervisor requesting to change your course.
In your letter,
say what course you are doing now
why you are not satisfied with that course
what course you would like to change to
Dear Mr. Barnes,
I am writing in connection with the course that I am enrolled in at your esteemed institution. This letter is to request you for a transfer from my current subject into a more relevant one, which will suit my requirements.
I am in the first year of the All about marketing 101 since July of this year. As I work in an advertising agency, I believed this course will give me a push in my professional growth trajectory. I am very happy with the professors and the fact that I can attend these lectures after work due to its convenient evening slots. Unfortunately, I have now realised that this subject is not what I was looking for when I enrolled into the school.
In the program brochure, there was a mention about covering the digital marketing developments, however, this was restricted to only an article from Times magazine on this topic. The predominant reason for selecting not only this course but also this institute was the promise of helping me stay up-to-date on the recent advancements in this field. Moreover, when I suggested for adding these topics, the teacher informed me that it does not fit into the timetable.
I would like you to transfer me into the new Digital Marketing 201 which commences from the start of the next month. I am happy to move either to the weekend batch or the evening classes.
I look forward to receiving your positive revert on my request for a course change for my 2nd year.
Yours sincerely,
Karishma Dave
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mr. Barnes, I am writing in c...
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Line 3, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mr. Barnes, I am writing in connection with the cour...
^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 224, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t one, which will suit my requirements. I am in the first year of the All about ...
^^^^^
Line 8, column 250, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...py with the professors and the fact that I can attend these lectures after work d...
^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... for when I enrolled into the school. In the program brochure, there was a men...
^^^^^
Line 11, column 467, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hat it does not fit into the timetable. I would like you to transfer me into the...
^^^^^
Line 13, column 164, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...appy to move either to the weekend batch or the evening classes. I look forw...
^^
Line 13, column 190, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... weekend batch or the evening classes. I look forward to receiving your positiv...
^^^^^
Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...end batch or the evening classes. I look forward to receiving your positive...
^
Line 17, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ge for my 2nd year. Yours sincerely, Karishma Dave
^^^^^
Line 19, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... Yours sincerely, Karishma Dave
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, look, moreover, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 45.0 32.9175257732 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 26.3917525773 144% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1242.0 937.175257732 133% => OK
No of words: 261.0 206.0 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75862068966 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72736120476 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 127.690721649 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567049808429 0.622605031667 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 380.7 290.88556701 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.4990070385 44.8134815571 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5384615385 76.5299724578 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0769230769 16.8248392259 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.46153846154 4.34317383033 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 2.54639175258 432% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193185595625 0.216113520407 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654395921245 0.0766984524023 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581263247832 0.0603063233224 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120205408676 0.12726935374 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700558967675 0.0580467560999 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 8.37731958763 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 41.2886597938 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.2247191011 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.25 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mr. Barnes, I am writing in c...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mr. Barnes, I am writing in connection with the cour...
^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 224, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t one, which will suit my requirements. I am in the first year of the All about ...
^^^^^
Line 8, column 250, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...py with the professors and the fact that I can attend these lectures after work d...
^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... for when I enrolled into the school. In the program brochure, there was a men...
^^^^^
Line 11, column 467, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hat it does not fit into the timetable. I would like you to transfer me into the...
^^^^^
Line 13, column 164, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...appy to move either to the weekend batch or the evening classes. I look forw...
^^
Line 13, column 190, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... weekend batch or the evening classes. I look forward to receiving your positiv...
^^^^^
Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...end batch or the evening classes. I look forward to receiving your positive...
^
Line 17, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ge for my 2nd year. Yours sincerely, Karishma Dave
^^^^^
Line 19, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... Yours sincerely, Karishma Dave
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, look, moreover, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 45.0 32.9175257732 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 26.3917525773 144% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1242.0 937.175257732 133% => OK
No of words: 261.0 206.0 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75862068966 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72736120476 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 127.690721649 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567049808429 0.622605031667 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 380.7 290.88556701 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.4990070385 44.8134815571 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5384615385 76.5299724578 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0769230769 16.8248392259 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.46153846154 4.34317383033 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 2.54639175258 432% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193185595625 0.216113520407 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654395921245 0.0766984524023 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0581263247832 0.0603063233224 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120205408676 0.12726935374 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0700558967675 0.0580467560999 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 8.37731958763 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 41.2886597938 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.2247191011 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.25 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.