In many countries mass consumerism has made food cheaper and food products are becoming increasingly harmful to health. This is because profit is often considered more important than wellbeing. In other words, more food manufacturers are putting profit before health.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that nowadays food has been becoming more affordable for people thanks to mass consumerism. However, food products also have a negative impact on human beings because some food companies consider their revenue more important than consumers’ health. I completely agree with such a view.
There are several plausible reasons why food manufacturers are putting profit before health. First, they even add more unhealthy ingredients, including salt, sugar or fat in their products in order to encourage people to consume more. In other words, while people are absolutely full, they cannot deny those flavourful foods which contain much more acceptable levels of such ingredients. As a result, the more food consumers eat, the more profits companies can reap regardless of the health problems that consumers may deal with. Second, by using ingredients of poor quality to minimize the manufacturing costs, food companies’ earnings are growing at the expense of the public’s health. For example, according to an annual report of the Vietnam Ministry of Health, there are thousands of food poisoning related to cheap foods every year. This means that food safety may not be the most concern of these food companies, which can harm directly to people’s health or even cause deaths.
In addition, there are some enormous issues when profits are always put ahead of wellbeing. One of the most urgent issues is that there is an increasing health problem, such as cardiovascular disease or obesity epidemics, relating to consuming too many calories per day. In fact, by making the most of advertisements on media, food companies can shape consumers’ attitude towards their products, leading them to be addicted to such foods. Thus, if food manufacturers do not change their policy, the world will face a medical catastrophe soon. The second problem is that food companies also pose a threat to the environment when it comes to mass consumerism. For example, when they increase their productivity to catch the demand, the amount of toxic chemicals is also released more, which is considered one of the main causes of global warming. As a result, human beings would pay the price for their greed which has caused serious damage to the environment.
In conclusion, although mass consumerism brings benefits to people, I believe that more companies just focus on their revenue rather than human health. The government should raise the level of food safety and pass laws to request more responsibility from food companies to their consumers.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 295, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the advertisements') or simply say ''most advertisements''.
Suggestion: most of the advertisements; most advertisements
...alories per day. In fact, by making the most of advertisements on media, food companies can shape cons...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, second, so, thus, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, in other words, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2146.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 409.0 315.596192385 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24694376528 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76393729275 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 176.041082164 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581907090465 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7827393045 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.947368421 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5263157895 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42105263158 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.414512650477 0.244688304435 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130775432872 0.084324248473 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0826046011192 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268759083313 0.151304729494 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0796313060395 0.056905535591 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.