Governments give a lot of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used some elsewhere.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Every year, artists receive a large amount of financial support from governments. While some people argue that funding arts is necessary because they could help children learn better, I believe this is a waste of money since arts are just for a small group of citizens.
On the one hand, grants from governments could make more arts available for children, and these arts, in turn, could benefit children’s learning process. These benefits include cultivating children’s young imaginations and enhancing their academic achievement in multiple subject areas. For example, a study from MIT has shown that students who receive arts education exhibit improvements on standardized test scores and their performance in other subjects, such as math and reading. However, I believe governments should spend money on providing all children with basic education first since, in many countries, a large number of children still live in poverty and cannot afford to go to school, so the idea of using arts to stimulate their minds and enhance their academic performance in those countries seems far from realistic.
One the other hand, spending taxes on arts is seen as unnecessary. This is because arts are only for specific groups, upper and middle classes, not for all citizens. In fact, people in poverty cannot afford time to appreciate paintings and pictures. However, these people also have to pay taxes. In this respect, if the governmental budget is invested in the sector, all the public cannot benefit from this. Thus, I believe that money should be spent on more valuable fields, such as public health and poverty problems so that everyone can equally take advantage of government funding.
In conclusion, although giving financial aid to arts could benefit children’s performance in school, government spending should be used to address more pressing problems first.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 177, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
... because they could help children learn better, I believe this is a waste of money sin...
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Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to process'
Suggestion: to process
...turn, could benefit children’s learning process. These benefits include cultivating chi...
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Line 3, column 615, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ucation first since, in many countries, a large number of children still live in poverty and cann...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, still, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1588.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3468013468 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71318638468 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579124579125 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.9518689074 49.4020404114 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.153846154 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8461538462 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23076923077 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122058562421 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0437547010114 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427625091824 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0908219105281 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0418284667794 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.