As one progresses in life need may arise for one to make positive adjustment that may lead to better the life of an individual. The prompt averts that nowadays, people spend more time in pleasurable living than in serious task which demands commitment and seriousness. I most likely agree to the above statement because of three reasons.
Firstly, failure to make proper plans may result to backwardness in terms of achieving a particular aim. I have noticed recently that most of my close friends especially those whom have shared their experiences about their particular areas of interest in business showed and express disappointments in terms getting a particular figure that they ticket for that specific business. When I engaged some of them to enquire about the cause of such failures, some , were open to share with me that the inability to arrive their ticket was primarily because they failed to make proper plans against future unforeseen circumstances. Given such a situation it shows some level of set backs..
Secondly, more time spent on enjoyment, brings about poor productivity. Like in the above paragraph, it has been explained that failure to plan may cause set back. Looking at it from the dimension of enjoyment, it could also be said that too much of enjoyment could lead to poor productivity, especially, to those who are business oriented person's.Hence, some persons, may avoid such occasions, that may correspond to lack of productivity in a business.
Thirdly, man is holistic hence, there are times whereby, need for pleasurable act could come in and it is important that one address such a situation. For example, it is common phenomenon that when someone works all day, the person needs to take some rest so that such a person does not get to break down. In this sense, it cannot be fully said that enjoyment is given priority over the act of commitedness; since by right judgement, it is something appealing and worth doing to have rest especially after stressful works.
To conclude, it cannot be conclusively said that modern people are prune to excessive pleasurable living that surpasses that of acting in a committed manner given the above reasons.
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- TOEFL ESSAY Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Subjects such as art music and drama should be a part of every child s basic education 73
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...tuation it shows some level of set backs.. Secondly, more time spent on enjoy...
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Suggestion: Hence
...those who are business oriented persons.Hence, some persons, may avoid such occasions...
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... it is important that one address such a situation. For example, it is common ph...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1835.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05509641873 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82695778447 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567493112948 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.1229329133 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.071428571 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9285714286 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64285714286 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109677729477 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.039690123455 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460842421804 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0602499340113 0.150856017488 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414572111647 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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