It is clear to see that the advertising industry has been being a rapid development in current years. Because of the negative impacts of the way toy or junk-food companies use to broadcast their goods, some people keep the belief that the authority must ban these kinds of ads. In this essay, I totally agree with this idea due to some reasons as follows.
First of all, the firms which produce children games always make up several methods to attract their targeted buyers. In fact, these companies do not think about how harmful their products, or whether these things can bring any advantages for children development. They only care much about the total revenue after that. As a result, children, who are curious about new things, will want to buy these attractive toys for the first time they see or hear, whereas their parents do not know which one they should buy among the things called the educational toys.
Nevertheless, food manufacturing, especially for children, also makes the public believe that these are delicious and healthy foodstuff. However, in the age of advertisement, no one can give the guarantee of nutritions in a wide range of junk-food. For instance, there are plenty of companies insist on the high level of their products' nutrition, but in actual these contain the substance is bad for health.
In conclusion, due to these mentioned-above reasons, I strongly agree with the opinion that there should have the policy to ban these ads. However, it will take time, so the children's guardians need to raise their awareness to recognise the well-qualified things to buy.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 173, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, so, well, whereas, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1333.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97388059701 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70044869336 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630597014925 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 402.3 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2685658659 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.083333333 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5833333333 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227013558692 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731630527835 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408609184875 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130350684756 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0475384505799 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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