More people now buy products that they do not need because they are persuaded by advertising. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Whether or not advertising is convincing people to buy commodities which are not needed remains a much-debated question. To the best of my knowledge, I totally agree with this statement.
First and foremost, people cannot resist the temptation of discounted products. To put it in another way, nowadays it is common to see that many people decide to buy an item because of its cheap price, although they do not actually require this. This is shown by the following example. When being interviewed, a woman who bought two sets of cosmetics in a discount period said that period was the best chance to buy commodities with lower prices even when you do not need them because you could put them aside for the future. Therefore, obviously advertising by lowering the prices make people buy goods which are out of their need.
Furthermore, advertising always catches the attraction of the consumer by organizing many promotional campaigns which are normally called “give away”. To clarify, when buying products during this period, clients are able to purchase some merchandises which are accompanied by some presents such as: but 1 get 1 or buy 1 get 2 and so on. Hence, more people charge for these possessions to receive the presents without taking into consideration of their unnecessity. Take my sister as an example, she bought five similar T-shirts in order to get a giveaway sports shoes in a sale promotion activity. Hence, this is a tricky way of advertisement to encourage customers to purchase.
Given the aforementioned points, it may be concluded that people are persuaded to buy unnecessary items by various advertising strategies, which typically are reducing the prices and offering extra items when people buy their products
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'Whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: Whether
Whether or not advertising is convincing people to buy...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, may, so, therefore, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1460.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1048951049 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91146017022 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608391608392 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.3067444801 49.4020404114 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.307692308 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61538461538 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270913219147 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0797508055706 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622294479273 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1540234672 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579755037092 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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