Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view

Extreme denotes reaching the highest point in it, extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing is considered to be among the most furious adventurous sports out of all as they are quite breathtaking and dangerous too. I totally disagree with making these sports banned.
Adventurous sports like sky diving and skiing has its separate fan base among people who are fearless , as these sports play a vital role in order to succor an overall enhancement of an individual's personality as it fosters courage, moreover makes a person stronger physically and mentally to due to which he can make decisions better in life and in different situations and do da today task without any fatigue. Moreover, the flex muscles also improve and works better these extreme sports teaches us how to think in these extreme conditions, makes us tough from outside as well as inside. However, I feel these sports are dangerous to some extent if not performed properly then it can lead to death so it should be done with proper guidance in order to enjoy it. Nowadays technology has provided us every different safety equipment's which make sure we are almost secure however, we are still not totally dependent on technology it needs to be done under proper guidance as in proper training needs to be given prior to performing it with cross-checking all the safety norms under trained professionals who are in this sports from several years after all this it can be enjoyed and leading to fewer mortalities affected.
All the above aforementioned indicates that these sports should not be banned at all moreover it should be encouraged as it provides more jobs and attracts tourists also if done with proper guidance and safety measures.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, so, still, then, well, after all, i feel, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1426.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93425605536 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66994546743 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570934256055 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 41.0 20.2975951904 202% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 131.561733783 49.4020404114 266% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 203.714285714 106.682146367 191% => OK
Words per sentence: 41.2857142857 20.7667163134 199% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.8571428571 7.06120827912 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283633030604 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141584284224 0.084324248473 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598810366694 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217542149352 0.151304729494 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0635748639189 0.056905535591 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.4 13.0946893788 171% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.86 50.2224549098 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.3 11.3001002004 171% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.4 10.1190380762 182% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.7795591182 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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